|Reviews for Betrothed|
| Invincible Shinji chapter 1 . 10/9
I agree with the Guest Reviewer and Hawk Sage. I think you should have Miyabi stand up for Shinji against Asuka and have her help him do so for himself. I think Hikari would get along well with Miyabi. I think the real wild card in this besides Gendo is Rei. I'm not sure how she will mix or deal with the engagement. I feel like Asuka being in college and in America as well as Europe she may have at least into Mayu and possibly Tina as well. I also think you should have her try to move Shinji into the Hanabashi/Sakuraba estate. I feel that Miyabi and Ali's mother would be a good influence for Shinji. At what point in Eva does this take place? Rather early I take it. I feel like it'll help Shinji with his problems post angel fight to have someone like Miyabi comfort him or talk to about it after. Might keep him from running away. Anyways I hope to see you pick this up before long and I'll try to get more for DW V3 out for you over the break. ;)
| Guest Reader chapter 1 . 12/31/2015
This is a great story, and has so much promise. Please don't abandon it. I would really like to see what happens next. Miyabi would be good for Shinji, I feel. Sure, she can be a little brusque, but she genuninely cares for those around her, and I KNOW she won't put up with Asuka's BS and attitude towards Shinji for one minute. Somehow, I feel Miyabi knows German, and would be able to tell Asuka off in her Mother Tongue.
I also could see her having Shinji snuggle with her when he feels lonely are has nightmares. It has to start somewhere.
What I think would be neat, and within tha character of the story you have made, is Yui, in the agreement, said she didn't want Shinji to grow up lonely and unwanted. She wanted someone who loved him and would take care of him. That is Miyabi.
And WOE to Gendo when she finds out about him and his treatment of him. She'll hanging him up by his you-know-whats and use him like a pinata.
Continue this lovely story, if you please!
| StraightedgeWingZero chapter 1 . 8/24/2013
I'm intrigued by this I'd say Miyabi should just grab Shinji and get him out of Misato's apartment ...like right now
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/8/2013
This is a fantastic story im lookin fowored to the next chaptor i hope that u bring it out soonckeep up the gd work
| 1sunfun chapter 1 . 12/14/2012
| hawkSage chapter 1 . 3/15/2012
Shinji and Miyabi together? Cool. I'm hoping that you have him moved into the Sakuraba Summer Mansion with the others and away from Gendo and his lackeys. They'd actually make a good couple with Shinji's shy and independent nature and Miyabi's take charge attitude. It would be funny to see Tina constantly teasing her about being a cougar and asking if she wouldn't mind sharing him just to get one of Miyabi's famous over the top reactions. ;p
Really good story, and I hope it will be updated soon.
| Sean Malloy-1 chapter 1 . 12/15/2011
You posted a story where the first 2 numbers are the name of a "Naruto" character. Nice start to the fic, I hope to read more.
| Halo Knight Zero chapter 1 . 1/7/2011
There's a problem with this story...it needs more chapters. Looking forward towards your next work!
| King of the Fallen chapter 1 . 12/22/2010
...HAAAAAAA HA HA HA AHA HA HA, Shinji is so boned. I loove their reactions, please update soon, ja ne.
| GuardEzio chapter 1 . 10/29/2010
im not gonna flame or complain about the story because its very good (can't wait till the next chap btw & im guessing this is ether before asuka arives or she's out somewere) but i really REALLY hope that you have some plan in mind on how you'll update all these awsome fics of yours without litting them die or you burning yourself out and leaving them all unfinished for good ;
| aznblackhowling chapter 1 . 10/24/2010
This is an interesting story. I look forward to seeing how the story will change with Shinji being backup up by the Sakuraba family.
| Arukoir chapter 1 . 10/23/2010
This is a very interesting idea for a story. Please keep writing it!
| Cylon One chapter 1 . 10/23/2010
Now this has got to be one of the most interesting arranged marriages I have ever heard of.
One I have really got to check out.
Between Shinji and Miyabi.
Oh this is going to be good.
Look forward to seeing how things go between them between what happened here and the wedding day.
As well as the wedding day.
And what may follow it if we continue on beyond it.
Not to mention the reactions from Aoi, Kaoru and the rest back at the Sakuraba Summer Mansion when they learn the news that Miyabi is getting hitched, and to whom.
Hope the update is soon.
| Rose1948 chapter 1 . 10/14/2010
I neither watched nor read "Ai Yori Aoshi." However, that doesn't prevent me from enjoying a story. I like this. Please continue when you can. Thank you.
| Dragoon Galaxy chapter 1 . 10/13/2010
just so you know i'm against arranged marriages, unless the couple getting married actually like each other