|Reviews for Heartbroken|
| Rita01tx chapter 2 . 3/9
Hahaha! The idea of Tanya's hands on her man doesn't bode well for Tanya when Bella gets turned!
And, such open communication is definitely conducive to a mature sex life for our lovely couple!
| Rita01tx chapter 1 . 3/9
Edward has turned out to be an amazingly adept lover *swoon!* Also, I agree with you that SM never explored his and Carlisle's time together in the beginnin'. I can absolutely see your explanation as logical. But, I don't think he'll follow through with this experiment...well, we'll see!
| kiwihipp chapter 2 . 1/22
That was really good! A more open Bella and Edward than in the book, but one that one can imagine too!
| kiwihipp chapter 1 . 1/22
That was a very interesting chapter, giving insight into Edwards thinking. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
| RosalieSmiled chapter 2 . 2/26/2013
You had some interesting ways to "fill in the blanks." I enjoyed reading the thought process.
| Rebadams7 chapter 2 . 1/23/2013
This is very well told and written. Heartfelt
| baldtomato chapter 2 . 10/4/2012
continuing on the awesome gap-filling! cool! i'm happily surprised to see a chapter 2 to what i thought is a one-shot
- it always intrigued me that Edward could see Esme as his MOTHER when she's younger than him both in vampire age as well as human age if corrected to human birth year. That, and was Carlisle a father from start to finish? i find it hard to believe a solitary being was tuned into the father mindset automatically. Now THIS makes sense, if the marriage changed him into a gentler and more authoritative demeanor, in your words.
-I also love your point that Edward felt bad for even taking the bad guys' lives because then they'd have no chance for redemption, no warning of the end.
-"Neuter my ass! With you I was all male and wholly heterosexual." - hot hot hot. Maybe you could have nicknamed this fic "Gay or neuter" LOL. That's what i'm gonna remember it by, tbh.
| baldtomato chapter 1 . 10/3/2012
hi, awesome one-shot. I read the Unicorn too. Great exploration into the canon gaps. Makes you wonder whether SM set up the canon backstories KNOWING there were such perfect explanations - why Carlisle picked a boy/man to turn instead of a woman, what would newborn Edward think about that, what they would look like to the Victorian-outside-eye. What prompted Edward into leaving C and Es (jealously and abandonment). Whether Edward was gay ... great exploration.
| RedneckAngel chapter 2 . 8/1/2012
Very well written and beautifully erotic. I was very sad to see where it ended, but the delicious suspense makes it worth it. :)
| TwiliteAddict chapter 2 . 4/16/2012
Hey! Stopped by to read it after I saw it on Twitter. Very (Edward) introspective. I would think it very possible for Edward to experience these thoughts/urges. Thanks for writing.
Two additional items: first, I saw you reference Red Summer. She and I had become quite close, but I have not heard from her in some time. Have you?
Also, I know you started reading FI (and I hope you will continue) and just wanted to add, if I flubbed up any Italian, let me know! Thanks.
| 68151308 chapter 2 . 4/1/2012
Wow. When I read the description for this, I was a little unsure but just wow. What a fantastic short story. It gave a great insight into the dynamic between Edward and Bella. Your writing style is excellent too.
| ladylibre chapter 1 . 1/23/2012
Honey...you had me at the first line!
"Love, come for me."
I think I read that ten times before going on, LOL!
This is an intriguing first chapter, and I cannot wait to read the next one! Edward's confession about his confusing love for Carlisle makes TOTAL SENSE. Of course he'd feel betrayed when Carlisle found Esme...again, that makes total sense. I love this insight into Edward's past. So rich and fulfilling :)
| withany chapter 2 . 10/19/2011
I really had to chuckle at "neuter, my ass" because it's so unlike the Edward we normally hear. This was an interesting look into his formative years and motivation and how huge an effect meeting Bella had on every aspect of his life.
I really like how you think and write.
| withany chapter 1 . 10/19/2011
This is a different train of thought from any story I've read before. It's good to see a different viewpoint.
Now to see whether Bella was right.
| Julia Ba chapter 2 . 9/13/2011
What a beautiful story! Though it is short there's serious thought you put in it and I loved the way you opened E's character through sexuality.
If something's truly missing from the original twilight saga then it is the scenes like these - intimate scenes that show the depth of the characters and through their history too.
I loved it! Thank you.