Reviews for Mr Brightside
jaspersmate81 chapter 1 . 5/27
Very cute.. The way Major worded some of the things he said to Bella was a little confusing. Like why did he call her an insolent child if he was trying to make her want to be with him? I liked the Eddie Boy torture though. Always welcome in my book. I wish that you would continue it and extended it farther than a one-shot. Even a two-shot or maybe a multi chapter story. It has a potential for greatness. Like how would the rest of the Cullens, especially Malice, Doc, Rosabitch, and Doucheward react after the rest got back home? What would they do to interfere, because you know that they would. Keep up the excellent work. Please continue it.
MCR Killjoys chapter 1 . 1/7/2013
i loved this oneshot, i hope you can make this into a full story x
Ana chapter 1 . 7/28/2012
This fic is gorgeous! Have you ever though about doing it longer?
Please continue the story.
Thank you very much and kisses from Spain.
GeezerWench chapter 1 . 5/22/2012
That was pretty intense and I think it was well written.

The one thing that kinda bothered me a bit though was Jasper speaking of himself in the third person.

I understand you were showing Jasper as two personalities - Jasper and the Major.

The rhyming thing was a little strange. Lends an air of horror. (Just a touch.) though it doesn't appear as though Bella heard that part.

Did seem to have the desired effect on Edward, however.
MoonPrincess623 chapter 1 . 12/19/2011
Yes, I am madly in love with the Major and his alter, Jasper.

Great story! Me loveth!
Jasper3Bella 4ever chapter 1 . 7/29/2011
Jasper went insane...but I loved it!
plainjane96 chapter 1 . 7/21/2011
I loved it. you should write more chapters, i think it'd be an interesting story
Guest chapter 1 . 6/30/2011
Loved your story. Jasper is such an interesting character and seeing his other side was great. thanks
Hisuiko chapter 1 . 5/15/2011
Wonderfully intense ... would love to read more/grin.

Hugs

Hissy xxx
BokuWaHime chapter 1 . 11/20/2010
thank you very much!

I will be looking at your other stuffs!
MovingSomewhereElse chapter 1 . 11/2/2010
I for one am madly in love with the Major. He's hot. And dangerous. A total badass. And, damn, he's sexy!

I love this story, but my mind kind-of does this weird thing when I get a taste of danger. I t goes to a dark place, and it stays there for a few hours.

~Kati~

**Emmett's Twin**...sadly.
Inuyasha-twilight-fang-girl chapter 1 . 10/22/2010
That was awsome!
carry tompson chapter 1 . 10/16/2010
to cute. do you think you could right more chapters to see what happens afterwards
KittyAsrai chapter 1 . 10/15/2010
awesomeness xx
thinkofaugust chapter 1 . 10/14/2010
In love with it? Hmm...under-statement of the year. I have offically decided that even though I have anothe essay to write before the end of tonight I was gonna check you out. So I did. And I'm happy.

How cute is that twirling round and round scene? LIKE 00000000000000 THIS CUTE!

or somehting like that I don't know.

anyhow...I really suck at reviews I seems to find. All i can say is htat it takes a lot for a fic to get on my faves list; i like have to LOVE it. but this is goin' on :)

Lots and lots of hugs and Jasper cookies (cause you know you want some!)

Mouse!
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