Reviews for The Blind and the Unseeing |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Omg I got to the end an almost screamed. WHERE'S THE SEQUAL I CAN'T CLICK FAST ENOUGH |
![]() ![]() I really hope you address the part of her having troubles with her blindness because I think even a trained ninja would have some kind of trouble. Good story though. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ok, yes. I have to give it to you. Last scene was indeed awesome. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wouldn't Inoichi have been able to see Sakura-chibi's Inner? |
![]() ![]() Please please write a story about Hidan/young Sakura please please please please please |
![]() ![]() ![]() OH SH!T HIDAN! What chapter did Itachi see Sakura's "eyes"? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hmm I read some fanfic that has someone deaf so it not so much different |
![]() ![]() ![]() i am currently at this chapter, i must say that this is entirely one of the best ItaSaku fanfiction i have ever read. i can never stop reading. |
![]() ![]() ![]() well fuck. I cried so much... |
![]() ![]() Hey there! First thing first, my apologies for blowing theu the entire thing before writing a review but you must excuse me. The stories was bery well written and engaging never a boring moment. It also stands out from most of the fanfixtion I has read, it was very well researched and thought out, a fell small plot hole here and there but this was just maverlous. I finished reading the entire thing in less than 2 days with only around 3-4 hours of sleep in between. Thank you very much for this, even the smut was really good and artistic. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Look your story is good. and it's written well. But you have a continuity problem. One of the largest plots in this story is her being blind yet you repeatedly forget it. That's a rather large pothole that's difficult to ignore and very off putting. If she's blind, she can't watch Itachi spar, she can't see his black hair in front of her, there should be NO seeing or any of its synonyms. She's has sensory deprivation and she eventually attains a chakra sense...this cannot be visual. She still cannot See colours only impressions of objects. This error is consistent in the beginning chapters only to suddenly disappear when she's angsting about being blind. Also how did she collect her medicinal herbs from the forest without seeing or with any aid? I can understand her control in her cave since its hers but she's suddenly helpless outside the cave except when she's outside gathering medicine apparently. Look I'm not saying your fic isn't good. You've got a Marysue Sakura who has minimal conflict. The plot is really interesting even if it's broken by plot impossibilities. Your fic would be even more famous if you altered these bits. I hope this review was helpful |
![]() ![]() ![]() Again watch him spar?! No. You shouldn't have any watching or any other synonyms related to it |
![]() ![]() ![]() How can she see Kakashis eye gestures if she's blind? Also a blind person with no eyes CANNOT roll their eyes |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just so yall know, "sensei" in Japanese is not only used for teachers. Its used as an honorific for people who have mastered an art. Thus, doctors, teachers, authors, etc. theyre all referred to as "sensei". It would probably make more sense if yall stopped google translating and relying on anime and manga for language lessons... |
![]() ![]() ![]() how old is Itachi here? And if they are both still in ANBU (which we know itachi always was until he departed from the Leaf) then Kakashi should still be the stoic, and mentally disturbed teen before he began to get better... right? so, maybe, not so much reading pork books, and more brooding silence. |