Reviews for Stray
Stefini-spaz chapter 1 . 8/5/2011
I enjoyed this

it has a thrill to it

and i understand the below comments about it being the sentences being a little bit awkward at times

but thats nothing a beta can't fix!

anyway other than that

great job

and please contine
Jess chapter 1 . 8/5/2011
this was really good

and should def be continued
brankel1 chapter 1 . 5/31/2011
Great job.
Regrett Gets exhaust3d chapter 1 . 3/25/2011
please update soon i really like dis stori...a lot... UPDATE!


Windy Magic chapter 1 . 2/23/2011
This is getting pretty interesting!

Please update soon. I think this story is very promising :)
DitzyBrunette89 chapter 1 . 1/3/2011
I love it
pinkpaws-marauder chapter 1 . 12/24/2010
I really hope you plan on writing more! I really liked this story so far!
Tilly chapter 1 . 12/11/2010
An interesting story that flowed nicely. Your writing feels a little awkward and some of the sentences don't make sense. I get the point, but I have to think about it. They should be simpler and clearer. Also, you sometimes use certain adjectives that are too extreme for their context. For example, Angela probably shouldn't "bellow" when Jessica is trying to get her attention. Otherwise, this is a fascinating story. I like how you enticed the readers in the beginning and then brought the scene into context at the end. Good start!
Penelope C.E. Reed chapter 1 . 10/25/2010
This is very interesting and supenseful. please update soon.
Criminal-Dawn chapter 1 . 10/24/2010

I can't wait to read the next chapter!

Is Bella in the story?

I'm a bit confused as far as the timeline...

But it doesn't really matter to me :)

Anyways... keep up the good work :)

Update soon
liztherandom chapter 1 . 10/22/2010
I think your story is amazing and I can't wait to read more. I think its well written and I think you really did awesome of pulling the reader in. I hope you update soon.