Reviews for While You Were Sleeping
FenixMJR chapter 1 . 7/26/2011
Jesus you made me cry like a baby, very good story
askjdgf chapter 1 . 3/1/2011
Nawwww, a whole tidalwave of emotion in this. I confess my heart was on edge, wondering ... Lucky you made jazzy-pants pull through. I think you may have received a well deserved lynching if you did him him.

Is this fic continuing? it def has potential to be a WIP.

mwah Feralness xo
GLee68 chapter 1 . 1/17/2011
this story needs a tissue box warning!

that was really touching...

glad Bella was ok!
CharliDenae chapter 1 . 11/29/2010
Awwww! What a good story! I love how close all of the characters are. You could feel their love for each other. I felt so bad for Alice and was so happy when she woke up with Jasper stroking her hair. And her compassion for Bella, even though none of them knew the circumstances, was very sweet.

I really liked how you introduced Bella, also. This would make a great multi-chapter story after the contest is done! Good luck!
84gemstone chapter 1 . 11/20/2010
Mouse it's nice Jasper could save the day for once it's alway Edward now when will you write me an Emmett story? LOL
FrozenSoldier chapter 1 . 11/1/2010
You're making me cry here! I was so nervous that he wouldn't have woken up! Each time one of them went in there, and the memories they talked about.. gah. That made my eyes well up! This was really good though, and I loved how you introduced Bella at the end.

Those guys who did that.. *shakes head* I don't even have words for those fuckers.

Good luck :)
Twisted-Twilighter chapter 1 . 10/31/2010
Jasper, always the hero!
Orphaned-okay chapter 1 . 10/30/2010
It's well balanced of angst and feel good at the end, I really liked it, and it's very well written. Great job!
joayla chapter 1 . 10/24/2010
Soo sad! I was welling up hun! But then he woke up!

Beautifully written!
HeartOfDarkess chapter 1 . 10/24/2010
Oh my! bb you once again have managed to convey such emotion in this story, and with using few words. I loved how each person who cared for Jasper went in and told him about a memory between that meant something to them, and was of signficance. It's a shame that in human nature we wait until someone is potentially going to be ripped from our lives before we tell them how we feel, isn't it? I also loved how you brought Bella into the story as the victim, and how when Jasper woke he still thought of her wellbeing instead of his own precarious situation. What a hero! Thanks for sharing this...I bow to the mistress of the one-shot! loves u! xxLisa.
pbswimmer chapter 1 . 10/24/2010
I was wondering where Bella was in this story! Nice way to bring her in at the end.

Great use of all of the characters. Of course gallant Jasper would try to save her!
kymclark chapter 1 . 10/24/2010
Squee! I'm so proud of bb, you are ah-mazing! I love the little bits of description and how the story is just laced with hope and love!




SarahAH30 chapter 1 . 10/24/2010
Wow...I think I need a smoke now.

You had me biting my nails there honey hoping he woke up.

I think of the three o/s of your's I have read this is my favourite, difficult subject matter handled brilliantly.

Well done bb.