|Reviews for Just Animal Nature|
| Jhiz chapter 4 . 8/22/2013
not bad for a first attempt at smut... I know how hard that can be to create when it is not your normal topic (hmm, wonder if it gets easier *shudder* I so don't want to try again and see).
Anyway, thank you for the Oz and Buffy story. There needs to be more of them. They are a fun romp away from the norm.
| Gracfully chapter 4 . 7/2/2013
| Guest chapter 4 . 4/27/2013
Cute. Really cute.
| gottaloveva chapter 4 . 4/15/2013
Awsome! :) Please turn this into a story? :)
| locardxchange chapter 4 . 12/7/2012
Wow, ssoo very hot. For your first attempt at it you did good.
| Lyzzybelle chapter 1 . 6/15/2012
"Oz almost smelled the secret coming off him" what a great phrase!
| MMWillow13 chapter 4 . 6/2/2011
I must admit that right now I'm completely addicted to your work. You see and write the aspects that others often miss.
| skysayzrawr chapter 4 . 11/22/2010
Pretty damn well is how your attempt at smut came out. Your successful attempt! I like it better than some of the other stories I've read because they can just get a bit...much. This was sweet, and not-so-sweet, but very well written and didn't make me feel like I needed a shower to get off the 'icky' feel of reading it.
| RunnersHigh chapter 4 . 11/7/2010
"A/N: How'd my attempt at smut turn out?"
I'm sorry, but that was hilarious. The words you use, the concepts, the descriptions... I find it kind of a pity, really, because besides the overused concepts such as 'werewolves mate for live' and Buffy being incredibly drawn to the wolf, your writing is actually pretty decent. You've got some good things going on – your spelling and grammar's proper, the descriptions help set the atmosphere ('show, don't tell'), and a good deal of the jokes are pretty funny. Even the changes in the timeline are quite believable: you don't make a big deal of the timeline actually being off—which is good—and the way the characters act in these alternate events is handled well.
However, like I mentioned: the concepts are so over-used, cheesy and cliched, it feels like I'm reading something that might as well have been called “Buffy/Oz fanfiction #3827” instead of “Just animal nature”. The porn is just... I actually had to stop reading a couple of times because I simply had to laugh. Oz sticking his finger in to look for Buffy's virginity is wrong on many levels (not to mention very unrealistic – I don't think a man can actually feel anything, except maybe when his name is Ron Jeremy), as is Buffy's physical assertion of dominance by nibbling carotids and the marriage ceremony-style whispering. These things make the scene rather silly, and, I feel, quite out of character.
I do understand these things, together with the aforementioned cliched concepts, are the base for this fanfiction—after all, it's called “Just animal nature”—and that you practically need these things to get to the point you desire. What I'd like to see, though, is something a bit more well-thought out, in character, *original*. Judging by the rest of the fanfic, I do believe you are capable of writings such a thing. Try to come up with your own concepts, or if you can't, put your own spin on the existing ones, or at least try to not make them so blatant.
On the actual smut: while (or maybe because) I don't know how many NC-17 or R-rated things you have read or watched, when writing porn, or smut, or just sex in general, it's good to keep in mind that less is often more. You don't have to tell everything that is going on in order to write a good sex scene. For example, if your sex scene is intended to be romantic or cute, focus on feelings and the characters' experiences rather than the factual physical parts moving about. If you want to write a raunchy scene, simply leave part of the imagining to the audience: the blanks you leave in are often filled in in much smuttier ways by the reader than if you were to write in these parts yourself! These things especially good to keep in mind when you don't feel entirely comfortable writing such scenes, as I see you mention on your profile.
But these are of course just my thoughts. Apply them as you see fit. Don't be discouraged; you are on the right track. Write, study, and then write some more!
| Jeremy Shane chapter 4 . 11/3/2010
Good Chapter & More Please
| hideher chapter 4 . 11/2/2010
| Princesakarlita411 chapter 4 . 11/2/2010
great chapter cat wait to read more so update soon hopefully by nove 4th cause that my bday lol
| hideher chapter 3 . 10/31/2010
Love this pairing...very cute so far!
| Jeremy Shane chapter 3 . 10/31/2010
Good Chapter & more Please
| Princesakarlita411 chapter 3 . 10/31/2010
oh my awesome awesome
oz and buffy i like this paring usaually am a bangel fan if it just in the buffy universe crossover it can different ppl lol but u got me liking the whole oz and buffy paring so kudoos for u update soon
c if u can update by nov 4th