Reviews for Monster Diabetes
VampHateLover chapter 8 . 11/19/2012
nice story line , just read from chapter 6 onwards and i am pleased to say I am not disappointed reading this :D
Yuno chapter 1 . 10/3/2012
I don't think you understand the meaning of Diabetes...
FlyPandaBear chapter 6 . 5/25/2011
Ok look, it's a good story, but your sentences just go on and on and on... I'm reading it in my head and even my consious gets tired! You really need to work on your periods. And every sentence is like, 8 lines long and has like a million buts. It was so confusing. Please work on that
Lil' Pink Coupe chapter 4 . 12/3/2010
Aww, poor Link and poor Brianna - I hope they're both okay!
hazel chapter 1 . 12/1/2010
I tried to read this. I really did. It's just that the lack of punctuation makes it nearly impossible. Could it be possible to clean that up, a bit?
Raggedtoothguppie chapter 1 . 10/29/2010
Your summary makes it sound like a good plot but your never-ending sentences just throw me off completely. You have one sentence that is four lines long and has SEVEN "but"s in it! You must split the information into lots of little sentences. I'm interested to know what happens next but I can't make myself read another chapter like that.
Lil' Pink Coupe chapter 3 . 10/28/2010
Awww, Link is so sweet to Brianna...that was nice of him to decorate her cell!
Lil' Pink Coupe chapter 2 . 10/28/2010
Aww, That's great that Link was able to calm her down!
Lil' Pink Coupe chapter 1 . 10/27/2010
Wow - nice first chapter! This sounds like it will be a very interesting story! :)