is hermione gonna break teddy's heart :(

I have to say, I'm totally confused here. Hermoine's parents have been kidnapped, and she plans to rescue them by becoming a slytherin and hoping to be convincing enough to get recruited as a death eater? That would take how long? And just how convincing can she be when she is still biologicallly female in a boys dorm? I doubt that will go well! I thought she was concerned about getting to them as quickly as possible, this could take months to years taking her age into account.
There is no way the adults would have gone along with this especially if she kept her natural form and only cut her hair. Someone is going to recognize her face! Not to mention, nothing has been said about her voice yet. Kind of hard to fake that long term!
I've got to bring up Theo's presentation. Setting "Teddy" aside, him saying "goodness" and "Oh, I've missed you so?" Is this meant to set him up as being so effeminate, that it covers up Hermoine's slip-ups? Nothing will be enough cover when she is expected to change clothes or take a shower! A girl being shy over months might be understood, maybe. A guy, not a chance! Theo is already wrapping an arm around her, he'll have no problem with walking into her shower!
This plot line does have a lot of potential, but the execution leaves a lot to be desired. I just don't think it was too well thought out. This could turn out to be an interesting story, but with so many existing issues in only the second chapter, I don't see how. :-\ :-[

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
TEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEDDYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY

why everyone loved to kill Theo?

Ugh…this story is so frustrating. The plot moves at a snails pace. The same thing happens over and over again with so much recapping. The boys all have feelings for her, she is oblivious, let’s watch it play out over multiple scenarios; but Hermione will never realize and they will never say anything…. for what feels like 20 or more chapters.

Why is Hermione so stupid in this story? Once they know her secret and switch sides, why is she not including them in her plan? After the first time she came across Rookwood, the smart Hermione we expect would have realized she needed a lookout; or at least after the second attempt in which the exact same thing happened with another Death Eater. Also I don’t understand why she wouldn’t save her Parents and leave Teddy; there is nothing she can do for him and getting back into the Manor/to their room is highly unlikely.

Also, if the three boys are really her friends and willing to betray Voldemort, why have they not offered/insisted on helping her rescue her parents? Especially since they all have feelings for her. It’s just a glaring plot hole that makes the story aggravating.

The concept for this story is interesting, but the story is not progressing. It’s 14 chapters in and she has done nothing to work towards saving her parents; we don’t even know that she has a concrete plan versus her initial vague thoughts on how things would go.

Add to this the poor grammar and it’s becoming difficult to readremain interested. I still plan on reading to the end. The more I read, the more I wonder if English is not the writer’s first language; issues with tense, incorrect prepositions, word choices that don’t fit the sentence. I am hoping that we start seeing some movement and action in this story soon.

Great story so far! The plot is quite unique.

Thats...uh. one way to solve a love triangle. Square? Pentagon?

Wow.

GREAT STORY THO!

the 3 Slytherins are friends and Malfoy and Zabini are like fuck it, Theo died but the hell with him, There is not one ounce or emotion from them, nothing. its like they dont even care, this straight up ruins the story, developing the characters mean every one get to feel the loss of there friend not just the main character.

Ok it started good and now its down the drain, sorry for shifting emotions like that is just horrible writing.

Is surprising how you wanted to portray the friendship of the them but turn around and do a disservice to the story by simply ignoring the whole impact of his death on the other two.
Shouldn't Malfoy and Zabini feel something towards there friend is death? NO?

You probably won't read this (the story was made 7 years ago0 but i really really like your story! It's pretty awesome

I am actually crying right now :’(
TEDDY NOOOOO

You and George R.R. Martin would make such a cute couple lols

I could just imagine you two talking about this wonderful characters while simultaneously planning their demise and being, "so sad... sike?"

holy shite. So it is somewhat based on a Korean Drama