Reviews for The List of Words |
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![]() ![]() ![]() You write really well. I like how you are telling this story, and having them finally talk about what happened-and that Katniss is finally thinking about how all of this imacted Peeta as well. My only (hopefully constructive) criticism is in the last section of this chapter-it doesn't seem to be truly in character for Katniss how you wrote this. I wonder if less specific words/less specific descriptions would have been better, (and more in character for how she is telling the story). I do like how you are filling in specifics about the rebuild, and how they are interacting with others in district 12. Thanks for writing this! |
![]() ![]() ![]() So here's the thing. You have a potentially great story on your hands, there's no doubt. Your voice shines through and your writing flows smoothly. However, that last "adult" scene at the end is really what got me, and not in a good way. It's not the content that bothers me (i.e. the sex), it's the way you went about it. The scene portrayed does not in any way fit the characters, nor the atmosphere you've set up so far. It went from angsty and comforting to raunchy and unrealistic. Sex, esspecially between two virgins, is generally more awkward and weird and sometimes even sweet, not something straight out of a romance novel (i.e. porno). These characters deserve something more relalistic to thier personas, don't you agree? I'm telling you this not to judge you, but to push you in the right direction. You are a skilled writer and I don't want your whole fic ruined because you can't bring that skill to the rest of your story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story. You're a great writer! :D |
![]() ![]() LOVED IT! Truly does justice to the rating! Well done! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my god. This was amazing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome.e chapter. Can't wait to read more |
![]() ![]() ![]() The only thing I wanna say is: You gotta wright some more3 |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is really good! I hope you continue it. Can't wait for your update! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wonderful first chapter, I hope to see more soon. Keep up the good work. I'm interested in seeing how they deal with the baggage they have. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very good! This seems to pick up perfectly in the story before the epilogue. You blended this very seamlessly, adding more depth to the characters and story that we already know and love. I cannot wait to read more. You are a very talented writer, please keep up the wonderful work! |
![]() ![]() Please write more. I really want to see where this is going. It's a great start. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting! Well written. They really need to talk. Keep writing this! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my gosh... You. Are. My hero. This is such an amazing story! You have NO Idea how much I love this. I'm serious, it should be illegal for storys to be this good when they're only fics. I'm begging when I ask you to update soon. You have the right amount of each emotion, plus peices of humor mixed in. This is the best pre-epilogue story I've seen in a long time. Stories like this are truly hard to find. Thank you so much for sharing! And I hope you update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like this. I hope you update soon. I check for updates every morning before I go to school, and I kinda hope for another chapter. Like I said, this is really great. Cant wait for more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG, that last section of this chapter destroyed me. I can't wait to read more! |