Reviews for Patriot's Dawn
random reader chapter 2 . 11h
I cant help but feel a bit sad though that naruto's personality has changed a lot from his enthusiastic self when he began to gain new knowledge. It almost makes me glad that he hadn't gained much of it in the real series. ALMOST!

Love the story though. Great plot.
WellWhatDoYouKnow chapter 7 . 7/28
"he had no such compulsions anymore" did you mean to say "he had no such compunctions anymore"? Compulsions doesn't really work there.
ssj5 chapter 5 . 7/25
I love this ending!
grimmich chapter 5 . 7/21
Naruto was kinda whimpy this chapter... I know its supposed to make it more realistic and all and how you guys love to give characters flaws and shit but that was kinda pathetic i hope it gets better as it goes because so far it kind of irritates me...
grimmich chapter 4 . 7/21
How is it that a girl that neglected her training for years almost beat the second in class who was probably training with a weapon (the double kunia) before she picked up the tanto at all and has trained like crazy in strength and speed? I mean you made it a point to say he was on par with sasuke, so how is it she caught up so quick? The whole seduction thing isn't really an excuse...
Guest chapter 1 . 7/18
i just want to rant for a sec cool? ok i want to congratulate you for speaking your mind and telling people that naruto can be cool if he puts his mind to it but i have defend the naruhina love. hinata has loved naruto since day 1...000 but you get what i mean naruto needed hinata and still does sorry 4 flaming just wanted to get my point across
Ratchet2546 chapter 18 . 7/13
Here's hoping you haven't abandoned this great Story.
Spartan123465 chapter 18 . 7/11
i've followed your story for over a year now and its one of my favorites on this entire site. it'd be awesome if you could update it i've reread it 3 times already.
vysirez chapter 18 . 7/9
I like the story fairly well. I was a but surprised when Asuma died, but it worked ok within the story so I don't have any complaints. I am a bit disappointed with chapter 18 though. The entire time Tenzo was trying to stop the Ichibi and Naruto was defending him I was trying to figure out where the rest of the Kohona shinobi were at. The complete lack of backup for them is just retarded. The situation with the Ichibi was one of the most important fights in the battle, the only other area that might compare is the fight with Orochimaru, and yet they are on their own until just after Tenzo is disabled, and then only does some ANBU show up.

I also am a bit disappointed by how easily enemies can seem to infiltrate Kohono. Evidently ANBU masks are issued on street corners and Kohono has no way of telling if someone it just pretending to be an ANBU. Obviously if someone is wearing an ANBU mask, he's legit.

So the big fight with Naruto and the Ichbi was kinda cool, but it felt really forced.
Thewarrior1180 chapter 18 . 7/8
dude, you need to update this please :(
LoneWolfsRage chapter 18 . 7/4
Please continue
KnowPein chapter 6 . 6/30
so good uptill now...

quite original...
Shaydrall chapter 18 . 6/12
Not bad
TheWick chapter 18 . 6/8
Very good story so far... And I hope Tenzo isn't dead, Ino and Kiba were just warming up to him... Keep up he great work!
icecatfire chapter 2 . 6/4
out of curiosity will naruto learn the shadow clone at some point?
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