|Reviews for An Education|
| roche.mellark chapter 29 . 10/4/2013
this is based on the film? isnt it? !
| evonna chapter 43 . 10/2/2013
He's lovely. She's way too spoiled for comfort and incredibly full of herself. :) But it's nice that they got back together.
| evonna chapter 42 . 10/2/2013
Haha, she's such a silly ditsy girly girl, cooking up drama where there's none, no wonder he's confused :) she must be pretty cute for him to put up with this stuff LOL.
| roche.mellark chapter 3 . 10/1/2013
omg robert langdon!:)
| sssssssss chapter 10 . 8/31/2013
| MadAboutAusten chapter 46 . 8/28/2013
Are you really only 18yrs? Wow! I have to say you have a pretty darn good creativity writing this story. The most I liked about your story is how you blended the original Darcy and Lizzy's story in the middle. There, however, are aspects I felt were incoherent or unnecessary in the story. Like, it was not completely Darcy's fault to split Chase and Jan. Whilst he weakened their chances of getting together by throwing away Jan's letter, she could have gone and talked to Chase directly or Chase could have been a little more selfconfident and developed a personality to decide himself whether to continue or stop seeing her. His beating up of Darcy was completely unnecessary, although it helped him get Rin's affection. :)
. I also wished Chase and Jan helped Darcy a little more in getting Rin back. Jan's indifference in helping them during their misunderstandings was selfish. I expected a better character of her.
Also, her reaction during Darcy's confesstion of his involvement in her separation from Chase was astounding.
. It was all angsty for quite a few chapters, which BTW IDC since it was a HEA, but the story abruptly seemed to have ended.
. I'm not vindictive but I'd have liked to see some punishment to Carol and Matlock.
Anywho, overall I liked your story and you did a good job with it. Seriously, are u only 18?!
| Enaty chapter 3 . 7/28/2013
(continued) I suspect that might be the reason why someone else has called your characters “flat”. They go through a lot of shit, but they don’t mature accordingly, something you might expect they do when confronted with problems such as those. Especially Eerin is hardly ever conscious of her own faults and shortcomings, and when she is, she’s mostly unable to really work on them, just accepts them as given and Darcy to accept them and love her all the same. (In which she actually differs the most from Elizabeth, I think; she is, at the end of P&P, a mature young woman.)
Yes, Eerin’s young. And that’s one of the things you do when you’re young (been there, done that). And if you wanted to portray how unhealthy a relationship with a young, inexperienced girl can be for an older man, then you’ve really done a wonderful job at it. But as I suspect that was not what you were aiming at, I can only (sadly) tell you that this is about the effect your fic had on me. And it really pains me having to write this, because although I thought that Eerin was at times really stupid and immature, I very much liked your story and was rather astounded that someone so young could write a story with so much insight.
Now I’ve spent a good two hours on this review and it’s getting really late, and I guess you also can’t take more criticism from my side, but I hope you’ll forgive me for being so forward with my complaints. I really enjoyed reading, well, up to a certain point at least, and I’ll try to remember that first part.
Yours sincerely, Enaty
| Enaty chapter 2 . 7/28/2013
(continued) Again, I say that based on personal experience, and trust me, my ex-boyfriend doing this to me has left me severely messed up for years.
Maybe this is a little complicated to understand, but I’m going to try to explain it, although I kinda find it hard to put my thoughts into words. Well, I’ll try. She is expecting Darcy to come out for her sake, to tell the whole world that they are a couple, she is expecting him to risk everything for her. She does it only implicitly, but by protesting so vehemently against it, it’s more like she’s really saying “if you love me, you do it”.
So, if that’s what she’s out for – why in bloody hell doesn’t she stay when he requests her to, telling her that Carol can do whatever she wants? This is her chance to see if he’s going to be true to his word. Or why doesn’t she ask him to go to his boss and give up his job right at this moment?
Fine, it’s his decision. But she never makes a clear statement as to what her feelings are on the matter, whether she would want him to do so or not, whether she would be willing to through all the stress it would entail, and if not, what the reasons for her unwillingness to jeopardise his position are. She could also have offered to give up her studies, like he asked her to on his first proposal – but that thought doesn’t even seem to cross her mind in that moment.
It’s a rather complicated situation for both of them, so okay, I can understand that she doesn’t think about it at first. But why in all heavens does she accuse him of not having done what she wasn’t willing to do either? Why is she the one who gets to explain everything away by simply saying “I didn’t want you to give up what you love for me”? And he’s the one who gets the blame for it? Because he is – or at least, he’s taking it, or at least part of it, the moment he says that it was both of them.
I’m sorry; but a girl who’s asking her lover to give up everything for her sake is not at all emancipated or even conscious of what she’s doing. And it does not show any concern for her lover at all that while she pretends to be sacrificing their relationship for his sake, she’s still expecting him to do what she doesn’t want to do. She’s expecting him to cure her of her insecurities by proving to her that he loves her enough to give up his whole life for her – but what does she ever do to make him think she’s worth the whole trouble?
Right. Nothing. Expect be there and getting told by him every other chapter how adorable she is, how glad he is that she came into his life and how much she means to him. But except telling him that she loves him back, and trying to act more like a mistress in England, she doesn’t seem to put much effort into showing him that she’s anything else but an insecure child that likes to tell him off and make him apologise for everything she thinks he’s done wrong – while he doesn’t get to have his own opinion about her behaviour. Seriously, that scene in England where she stays at Ana’s room to make her point about him not making up with Richard? Is that any better than Darcy meddling with Chase and her sister? She thinks he should apologise, so she’s going to punish him until he’s realised what a stupid kid he’s been.
It very much reminds me of parents trying to raise a child. She never seems to be able to accept that he has his own opinion on some matters, or his own hurt feelings which maybe need some time to heal, too – but she is always asking for more time to sort out hers. She assures him a few times that what he did as a boy was okay and that she’s proud of him, but I don’t think Eerin has yet understood that a relationship is not one sacrificing everything for the other’s sake, but both trying to find a compromise and sacrificing things of their own without the other having to ask for it. You’re right in saying that no one should need to prove his or her life – but we all sometimes need some encouragement and especially directions as to what other people expect from us to know whether or not we’re doing the right thing. In Darcy’s shoes, would you have quit your job when your lover had just told you that she’d rather break up with you than asking you to give up your job? Really? Think about your answer. Because I know I wouldn’t. If my lover tells me that he doesn’t want me to give up my job, I respect his wishes – also because I know that giving up my job would make me miserable, and thus, also my lover. Love does not make up for everything. If my job is such a big, important part of my life, chances are good that one day I’m going to regret what I did, that I’m going to be angry at him because he cannot possibly make up for what I lost by giving up my job. And this is going to put a lot of strain on our relationship. I’d rather not take that risk if there are any other choices.
I apologise if I’m getting a little out of line here, but truthfully – Eerin makes me want to kick her. I’ve had my share of relationships, and I’ve also had my share of boyfriends trying to change me “for the better” by telling me how to behave, how to dress, and so on and so forth. So yeah, I can see a lot of that in Eerin, too – it’s just the same kind of condescending “Yes, honey, I know you’re maybe a little hurt and you don’t want to apologise, but do it – or I’ll be angry with you until you have”. I get that she feels threatened by his age, his experience, his wealth and all that, but I rather think it’s her who’s abusing her power over him rather than the other way around. And seeing how she behaves, I very much have to agree with his family, although I also think that they’re the most bitchy lot I’ve so far encountered in a P&P fic (and I still wonder how Victor is getting away with it, since her chances at getting him in jail actually aren’t that bad – if she has the medical evidence to prove an assault, if she has witnesses, even if there are other witnesses stating the reverse, she should at least stand a 50% chance of winning her case. Especially if they managed to dig up some of his former victims, what, with Richard’s help, really shouldn’t be that much of a problem – and courts in Europe nowadays tend to be quite strict about rape and sexual assault).
I’m not that much happier with Darcy, truth be told, because he just lets her walk over him in every respect, bends to her whims and wishes – and no, it’s not like she’s not asking him for anything. She’s not asking him for anything material, but she is asking him (although implicitly) to sacrifice his life for her – something he worked on for as long as she’s been alive, with nothing in return but the privilege of getting to marry her (and having her rub his faults in his face for the rest of his life, if her behaviour up till now is anything to go by).
I do actually call that kind of behaviour “selfish”, forgive me for it, but I do. I actually cannot see either of them growing much in this relationship, I can just see him falling from one emotional trap (being Ana’s overprotective and doting father) into the next (being Eerin’s overprotective and doting lover), and her curing her insecurities by abusing his feelings for her. And I cannot excuse her with simply saying “she’s hurting just as much at what she has to do”, because the same thing that applies to him applies to her, too – she does not have to stop fighting for him. She could give up studying, thus relieving him of the danger of getting fired for having an affair with his student, she could move to England with him and start studying at another university, thus depriving Carol of the chance of ruining his career, too, because I really doubt an English university would care very much if one of their professors had a fling with a student in Australia. As long as he behaves in his home country, they probably would shrug their shoulders and get on to a more important topic. University people tend not to care for very much that’s going on outside university, especially professors, and even less for things going on on the other side of the world (and believe me, I know quite a few of that lot).
That being said, it’s a complete mystery to me why Darcy doesn’t go to Chase about the whole blackmailing business; Carol is his sister, after all, and he has more than once made clear that he doesn’t think well of her. He already knows about their relationship, I’m quite sure he would be willing to help out. Or why Darcy doesn’t simply break into Carol’s hotel room – really, I reached the point of thinking “now that’s it, this is too far” when you had Eerin discover the unconscious Darcy in Carol’s bed. I felt it was completely unnecessary to add this little piece of drama to the ever-growing drama that was already there, and that was actually the moment I was really disappointed by Eerin. There she really had the chance of fighting for him, but did she ever act upon it? No; she again expected him to come crawling back to her apologising, with the firm conviction that nothing he said could make anything right again (and yes, I’ve also had one boyfriend cheating on me, so I know pretty well how much that hurts). I guess that was the turning point in your fic for me, the moment when I really wished Darcy would come to his senses, realise how utterly immature, uncaring and stupid Eerin is and turn his back on her. Someone who complains about the unfairness of the differences between men and women should at least be able to realise when she herself is making exactly that distinction by expecting him to sacrifice everything for her sake, just like the knight in shining armour from the fairy tales. Because that is exactly what she is doing – expecting him to fight for her affection, but not returning the effort, even trying to discourage him.
I suspect that might be the reason why someone else has called your characters “flat”. They go through a lot of shit, but they don’t mature accordingly, something you might expect they do when confronted with pr
| Enaty chapter 1 . 7/28/2013
after having read through your fic in the past few days, I want to take the opportunity to comment on a few things. I’m afraid I’ll have to concur with what Icyblossom wrote although I’m not going to state that Eerin is a “selfish brat”, but I will be exercising some criticism – I sincerely apologise if I’m hurting you with it since it’s not meant to, but well – criticism tends to hurt writers. God knows I know about that.
I’m going to start out with a few comments on the technicalities. You do have a rather good style and rather good spelling and grammar, however I noticed some peculiarities as to your writing. Maybe this is due to Australian English, I wouldn’t know since I’ve not really been exposed to that much, but is it common to write “she man” or “she girl”? Those might just be typos, but as I’m a rather careful reader, it buggered me somewhat. Especially since I don’t know what I shall attribute it to, different kinds of English or typos.
Then I noticed that especially in the beginning of their relationship (which means, in the chapters at Port Stephens), they “grin” and “smile” a lot, and are also “playful” quite a bit. I get you inserted all of those to lighten up the mood and make clear to your readers that they don’t have a care in the world right there and then, but a little less would have done the job equally well. Personally, I was rather bothered by it after a while, getting the feeling that all they were doing was sitting around grinning somewhat stupidly and playfully teasing each other.
Which they of course were, it’s just – you could just as well have left out half of those and still gotten the same result: they’re happy. Point taken.
Other than that, you have a rather engaging writing style and it was a good read. As for characterisation – well, I’ll come back to that later. Now I’d rather say something about the storyline.
I’ve noticed you tried to adapt a lot of the original events from P&P, and it was rather well done; I especially liked the birthday party equalling the Netherfield ball, or the constant hints to the original, of which I’m quite a fan. And I can also understand your desire to explore different situations in your stories, which you expressed somewhere in your A/Ns. I regularly do the same.
That being said, I must confess I do not understand why you decided on getting so very dramatic in the later chapters. Although I like Darcy being pictured as Ana’s father, I have to admit that reading of Eerin’s anorexia (which I already suspected a few chapters ahead) kind of made me … hesitate. I wasn’t sure what to make of it, truth be told. I’m not someone who thinks that giving a character a somewhat complicated background automatically makes them a Mary Sue, but I tend to be rather careful about it. So at first when I read on, I was quite comfortable with it as they were talking about things with each other and working through their issues.
But then there was this point where I stopped being comfortable with it and started thinking that maybe now you were starting to overdo things a little bit. This was when this whole thing with Darcy’s family, Carol Bingley, the rape and the near-death of the child started. Sorry for having to say that – but that much drama was, in my opinion, rather uncalled for. I knew you were planning something with Carol, that much was clear since Laura turned up, but … I don’t know how to phrase this without hurting you. Let me just say that it was too much in too few chapters, at least for me to be comfortable with. Again, I don’t have a problem with such issues being addressed, and I think you handled the almost-rape and Eerin’s reaction to it very well (especially considering what one usually gets to read when a fic features rape). But you didn’t give your characters really enough time to develop, to adjust or to deal with the situation – and you didn’t give the situations time to really unfold their potential.
And that being said, I’m getting to the last part of my review, which is closely linked to what I just criticised. Being a teacher at university myself, I am well aware of the dangers of getting involved with a student, and I have also witnessed more than one case of exactly that happening. I don’t know, maybe people are really strict in Australia, but over here (that “here” currently being Germany), although it’s frowned upon, relationships between professors and students exist, and I have so far not heard of even one professor losing his job because of it. Of course the authorities do not encourage it, however, if the couple manages to keep things well covered up and both are mature adults (meaning that they both have to be older than 21), nobody really cares about it, other than angry growling by other students.
That just being my experience with the whole matter. But well, I’m ready to accept that it might be a bigger problem in other parts of the world, and that the fic wouldn’t have as much potential for conflict if it wasn’t for that fact.
Before I start with the real stuff, one little note on something that irritated me quite from the beginning. Considering Eerin’s statement that she basically had to teach herself about sex and stuff, I get that maybe Jannali and Eerin don’t know about it, or maybe it’s also handled differently in Australia – but in Europe, a pregnant woman drinking alcohol is considered to be a rather neglectful mother. That involves drinking alcohol after she knows that she’s pregnant and drinking alcohol as long as she’s nursing, because both tends to be harmful to the babe.
As I said, I could understand Jannali and Eerin not knowing if their mother didn’t talk to them about it, but I was astounded that Maddy, having had a child herself, didn’t object to Jannali drinking wine once she knew about the pregnancy.
Then, finally, getting back to Icyblossoms’s statement that Eerin is being a selfish brat.
I have to confess that I understand exactly what she’s trying to say and why she’s saying it in the first place. But I have a lot to say on the subject, so I’m going to try to capture the thing as a whole.
While reading, I kind of got the feeling that you want to make Darcy pay dearly for almost every little thing in his life. I was actually both astounded and a little disgusted at how much he apologised in your fic, and how easily everybody, from Jannali to Chase to Eerin, accepted that everything had been his fault!
Which, if one takes a closer look, is not the case. Rather the contrary. Looking at what he did, it’s quite clear that he made some poor judgements and mixed into things he shouldn’t have mixed into, but while he manages to realise his shortcomings, the other protagonists continue being somewhat immature and blind to their own faults – the only exception being Chase, who at least acknowledges (but only to Jannali, not to Darcy) that he also made quite a mistake by letting himself be convinced so easily. Sure, he mentions it to Darcy while talking to him, but he kinda explains it away with how much he cares about Darcy’s opinion.
Darcy, however, is not allowed to explain his behaviour by his concern for his friend, and I really shook my head at the way Jannali behaved. Actually, Darcy is just being beaten up (Chase), beaten on (Eerin, Jannali), rather cruelly betrayed (Richard) and has to come crawling on his knees for forgiveness about 99% of the time. He does not seem to have the right to feel slighted, betrayed, hurt or any of the other emotions he feels – all the while Eerin telling him how he’s supposed to behave to be the man she expects him to be. Which is, actually, very much asking or more, claiming to give up something for her sake (or “whims”, as I’d rather call it) – a part of his personality. His feelings. Really not asking anything of him? I think no.
And this is, perhaps, what I mostly criticise about your story. It’s as if neither Jannali nor Eerin ever have to accept that their behaviour might have been encouraging how things went. It was actually what made Jannali a rather unsympathetic character to me right from the beginning; fine, so she’s been hurt, and consequently is being a little shy – but I really miss a moment of her realising that by being that she might have helped along Darcy’s accusations. Because honestly, no man or woman on earth is a mind-reader, and lovers aren’t any better in that respect than the rest of us. If she had given Chase more encouragement, he might not as easily have listened to Darcy’s and Carol’s accusations. But still she blames him for being the source of her misfortune, and he’s the one who has to come apologising – don’t get me wrong, he damn well should be, because he had no right to be mixing into this, but it is his right as a friend to voice concerns – if Chase listens to them, it’s his problem, not Darcy’s. He’s a grown-up, he is able to make his own decisions.
I thought for a good 30 chapters or so that Eerin was luckily a little better, but her reaction to Carol’s blackmail proved me wrong. If you were trying to picture Eerin as a rather emancipated young woman, I’m afraid she didn’t leave that impression on me. Rather the contrary. In fact, I think Maiya is more clever than she is. Because if Eerin really were grown-up, if she were emancipated, why in the heavens would she be asking Darcy to risk everything for her sake? No, this is not just simple guilt-tripping – this is a spoiled child retreating into her bedroom because she can’t have her favourite toy, while at the same time playing the martyr for being brave enough not to be asking for it. And, while we’re at it, let me just say another thing about guilt-tripping – that’s not a very mature way of solving problems either. And it’s certainly not a good way to ensure a relationship is going to work out, because basically, it’s blackmailing someone with his own emotions and feelings, and a very, very cruel thing to do. Again, I say that based on personal ex
| aussielover chapter 23 . 7/21/2013
I really like this chapter!
| Jessica chapter 1 . 6/7/2013
I also forgot to include a second ago, what makes your stories even more amazing is that they all have something original in them. Like in Sweet Lolita when we see Whit and Loli married, and everything that happens with that, or the addition of Howl and Toni and combining P&P with Emma in Love and Other Labels, or the Jacques story line in SYCMIOYO. It makes your stories a better read then all the other P&P modernisations, because there is still suspense...you don't know exactly what will happen. Anyway, I just wanted to add that, that's all I have to say.
| Jessica chapter 1 . 6/7/2013
This is about the 3rd time I've gone through and read all your stories...while they are all brilliant, this time, having read them in a completely random order, I'm struck by how much you've improved having moved onto this straight from SYCMIOYO. While the first was still amazing and you showed a flair for writing even then, when you were so young, this here is honestly better then some books I have read. Not only is is well written from a grammatical viewpoint, its also very witty, charming and a delight to read. You are truly fantastic and I can only imagine how good your writing is now.
| sammycakes chapter 1 . 2/9/2013
This story looks good but I can't get over the name change. Eerin Beaumont? I just can't : /
| CordiallyYours chapter 1 . 1/14/2013
hm? im confused after reading the first few lines. William Darcy is the husband of Lizze Bennet, correct?
| EmlynMara chapter 46 . 10/5/2012
Good story. Long. Very emotional. I did not like Eerin all that much. I felt she was very selfish. Her expectations and demands of Darcy were unfair to him. He gave her so much and she kept asking for more. Yes, he was selfish to an extent too, but the fact that she would not return to him because he would not give up his career was a bit too much, imho. Enjoyed the Australian setting. I wish Victor and Carol would have gotten a little justice. Nice to hear that Richard and Maddie were able to find some happiness.