Reviews for Perpetual Motion
croquette queen chapter 1 . 2/3/2011
I'm usually into the fluffy aspect of Twinleafshipping, but this was done so so brilliantly that I had to stop and reread it thrice over. You captured their characters perfectly- best piece of angst on these two I think I've ever read.
aestheticisms chapter 1 . 11/18/2010
This was beautiful. I loved the heartbreak, the emotions simply flew out at me. This was amazing

(I can't believe I hadn't seen this before.)
Shinsou808 chapter 1 . 11/7/2010
What this story needs is more showing, less telling. After almost every paragraph, I keep asking how or why with little to no answers. Delve deeper into their thoughts, express with dialogue, and integrate the fragments enclosed in parentheses.

As it stands right now, it's not bad, but it can ultimately do better.