|Reviews for You Didn't Eat Your Gun|
| TauriChick chapter 6 . 2/25/2011
Nice chapter. I'm enjoying your version of the two shows put together. Interesting to read what others are saying but don't be concerned about it too much. I haven't seen the NCIS episode in quite a while but I can't imagine you changed too much. Did the readers want you to label this story AU? Because it's really not.
It's a good bet that Jack only recognized Penegal because he expected Penegal to be the one piloting the ship. On the other hand, Jack seemed to be able to always recognize Thor when maybe the others didn't.
Jack being beamed into the wrong place didn't surprise me much at all. The little Asgard could have put him right into the OR in the middle of surgery or how about a locked padded room? Now you can see why I'm not a writer. Looking forward to the next chapter - hurry, hurry.
| Nedy Rahn chapter 6 . 2/25/2011
nice chapter, i bet abeam out would be something of a shock to those that have never seen one. I guess some of the NCIS team will be wondering about the appearence of Gen. O'Neill too.
waiting now to see where you take this next.
| Ayesha Jen chapter 6 . 2/25/2011
Your story is well formed and well written.
Do not be discouraged by people that are critical because you use your imagination. That is what this website is for afterall.
You are combining two of my favourite shows so you can do no wrong as far as I am concerned, LOL.
| antra chapter 6 . 2/25/2011
Hm, new Chapter.
I think Jack is perhaps the only human who can differentiate the Asgard by sight if he just looks and recognizes Penegal...
I liked that we saw the reactions of his disappearance from the White House. It could be interesting to see the other reactions to the relevations some people will have.
Looking forward to more
| mj chapter 6 . 2/24/2011
Really good chapter. I like that you have Jenny and Abby in it. Jack being beamed into the wrong place is funny. Is there an operation going on? LMAO
| Vicki Turner chapter 5 . 2/17/2011
This is an absolutely amazing story. Is another chapter coming soon?
| prudiisten chapter 5 . 2/16/2011
Very good cant wait to see jennys reaction to the beam out.
| don1234 chapter 5 . 1/31/2011
Nice chapter. The build-up is good and I'm enjoying the way you have put it together. The whole thing is fiction but if there were a stargate and Jack was the head of an agency that had resources, well, the way you're writing makes it believable. LOL
| Ayesha Jen chapter 5 . 1/29/2011
Do not be to long ! I can't wait for you to both these personalities together. Oh by the way great story line.
| Ayesha Jen chapter 3 . 1/29/2011
Well I have got to Ch 3 and I am really enjoying this. my two favourite TV series together, what could be better.!
| Nedy Rahn chapter 5 . 1/29/2011
Good story and a great way to bring the SGC into the plot.
| antra chapter 5 . 1/29/2011
What a way to leave a meeting.
And what a way to learn that an old friend of you is seriously wounded.
Looking forward to the next chapter
| PatriciaS chapter 5 . 1/29/2011
I'm sorry I've been a way from this story till now, I've just managed to catch up off line and in bulk.
Love the way its written, slow burning tension as well as a nice side story we never saw or possibly even thought of. Knowing where it was leading us gave it added tension for us.
Jack's thoughts during the dinner are so him, and the background of the meal gave us an insight of the people he works with and the President. Nice idea for building characters. Liked the way the group gradually disappeared as news got out and the last bit with the President asking Jack for help was brilliant.
You've also got the tension, shock and reaction for Tony, Ziva and McGee true to characters.
Looking forward to the rest ... Jack's shock and a disappearing Gibbs will be interesting. Just hope RL lets me keep up this time. lol
Thanks for sharing.
| TauriChick chapter 5 . 1/29/2011
Fabulous chapter. Not quite as long as ch 4 but plenty long compared to the other 3. I'm sure some people won't like where you ended it but I did. And I love this Tony had turned to watch them carry the boss down the corridor when suddenly his gut clenched and he thought he heard Gibbs growl, "Shake it DiNozzo while you still have a job." I watched The Rat Patrol on DVD and Sergeant Troy says "Shake it" to the guys when he wants them to get a move on. LOL
You did a great job writing the scene with Jack, President Hayes and all the others. Your characterization of him is perfect as fas as I'm concerned.
I'll be waiting for chapter 6. This story is wonderful. Thankyou for writing it and sharing it.
| trekkifulron chapter 5 . 1/29/2011
[Teal'c] Indeed. This Chapter was superior in many ways RipleysSister. However, I believe it should have been longer the previous Chapter was superior in that respect.[/Teal'c]