Reviews for Secret Service
caird56 chapter 5 . 8/16/2014
plz have the next chaper out soon plz
emokitten anonym chapter 5 . 7/21/2012
thank you sooooo much for mentioning a perfect circle i love them my fav song is Counting Bodies Like Sheep to the Rhythm of the War Drums im not bloodthirsty or anything but it reminds me of genocide. loved the electrabuzz comment and the plushie! i got a thing for stuffed animals if you havent noticed.
emokitten anonym chapter 3 . 7/21/2012
i know daisy is garys/greens sister from the game but im confused on lily. i havent played all the games and ive only seen the 1st season and the oned from DP forward so . . . i love your story so far though the stuffied aminals are cute and no i didnt misspell i say it that way.
emokitten chapter 2 . 7/20/2012
good song just heard it for the first time i now slightly dislike paul a little more.
myrddin767 chapter 5 . 5/27/2012
wow i am really intrigued as to how this will play out, the fact that you had ash and paul to be of different ages will be interesting to watch. I hope this gets updated soon :)
Cannot Wait chapter 5 . 4/1/2012
I Love this story! Please continue soon! I wanna know how this becomes a comashipping. (i'm just a little worried because it's been over 4 months since last update...)
JOcelyn chapter 5 . 11/25/2011
good so far hope u keep it up _
greenmonkey191 chapter 2 . 11/16/2011
"Love Me Dead" is indead a good song. I love it to death!
Bunnygoesbang chapter 4 . 11/9/2011
"one bite for Paul, one leap for society" Hahahaha! I really like this line. XD I found the interaction between Brock and Paul amusing and I would really like to see them interact more often. It was a nice update soon.
Vulpixi Misa chapter 4 . 11/9/2011
Yay! An update! I don't remember what the heck happened in the past chapters, I'm going to have to go back and read it again some time. There were a few typos that could have easily been fixed with spell check, but other than that, great chatper!

I wouldn't mind a mature scene (it's encouraged, in fact. XD) but only if you feel comfortable with it and if it isn't too out of place in the story.
Ashley Eon chapter 4 . 11/7/2011
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE don't make it m rated. I'd have to stop reading this then since my dad would freak.

And I like the touch on the green tea cookies :)
Zino chapter 1 . 9/21/2011
This looks very promising story! I love the idea, and I LOVE Paul! He seems pretty awesome in this! And I love how he and Ash finally met :'D.

So is Paul older than Ash, since he's applying the job of the teacher? I don't know what else to say, expect that I hope you continue this soon, since I'm totally hooked now! :D
Vulpixi Misa chapter 3 . 5/31/2011
The first thing I want to ask is the ages for all the characters. High school seems pretty young to me (18 for a senior?) and if Paul is old enough to teach then... (I'm hoping young/mid 20s?) And again, your Paul is amazing. So blunt and all but not rude, just honest. X3

But besides that and a few little typos, I really like this! The characterizations and all are amazing! (Cynthia just made me squee. She's so awesome that way you had her. So detailed!) The pacing is really good as well, nothing too rushed. (Sad face because Coma moments probably won't happen in a long time.)

And if you're asking for minor/side characters, I'd like to see all of Ash's friends (Dawn, May, Misty, etc.) I'm an Advanceshipper as well, so that would be lovely if you threw a hint there, but that's probably not likely. And a love interest for Reggie I wish would be Maylene but that's fine if it doesn't happen.
xxxDawngirl chapter 1 . 5/29/2011
I like the idea of Paul being a secret

agent! It fits his cold personaility.
Loulybob chapter 3 . 5/23/2011
I'm liking the story so far, it is interesting and has the promise of Comashippy moments to come ;D I like the idea of the plushies, and is Professor Elm's a Corsola? Just wondering ;P

And Daisy and Lily are Misty's sisters :D *noms on cookie* Is Violet going to be included?

And btw, it's only minor, but the banner said 'GO MIGHTY MICES' instead of 'GO MIGHTY MICE'. Is this intentional to show how bad the school is or is it a mistake? No worries though, it only occured to me after I re-read it :)

Keep On Writing!

Loulybob :P
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