Reviews for Forgetful Occurrences |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I lovethis so much! It’s great! I can’t wait to see what happens next. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a nice little story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like this story and hope you continue it. Good Day and God Bless :) Sincerely, LordGodsServant |
![]() ![]() i'm liking this so far one thing though...Toph can't see remember? (ch 1 at the end when toph was telling aang that she's seen those flighty look in his eyes) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This looks like to be a great promising story! :D I hope you update very soon! I just can't wait for the Taang to start! X) |
![]() ![]() A very interesting twist into the series; I like it! Although I think you hug the storyline a little TOO much; otherwise everythng else is quite sound :D good job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like where you're going and hope for more:P |
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![]() ![]() not bad at all :D; i thought that what u wrote cud have been melded into the story on its own; maybe u cud do more of these? |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is really good, I hope you add another chapter really quick! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well now, this is different. I don't think I've ever heard of a story that interpreted him 'letting go' to really mean it like that, but I can't say I fully disagree. We don't know what might have happened had he let his love for Katara go in that scene - Iroh fully agreed with him keeping it, implying that maybe something like this WOULD have happened, so who knows. In any case, you have an interesting formula to work off here. I've noticed that while Tophaang is a good concept pairing, it's usually written very poorly as a long-run story - most of the fics which make it the actual pairing that I've seen, which are also GOOD, are one-shots. You seem to be onto something MORE with it, though, which is pretty pleasing to see. Your characterisation of Aang in particular is pretty spot-on, and Toph as well. The others also seem to be depicted pretty well, too. And I loved the final line - 'a heavy heart doesn't suit such light feet', indeed. Very Toph. I think that you may be getting a good idea of the balance between her brusqueness and her hidden heart of gold. Toph's more compassionate side is very difficult to properly portray in dialogue, and writers always have to be wary of not going too far one way or the other. You are on the right track, so far, in that regard. Also like how the battle was reinterpreted. Fitting that with Zuko still aiding Azula, she'd get in her chance to strike Aang down like she did in canon. Obviously, I can't comment on changes to canon much at this point, but I think we have some good things coming. I'd like to see some longer chapters, and hopefully material from Toph's eyes as well, if you can manage it. And MAYBE some stuff from the POV of other characters too, but only if it builds on what we have (no sense rewriting stuff that's completely the same as canon which DOESN'T build on the plot. All-in-all, a pretty impressive first chapter which bodes well for things to come. gODSPEED! |
![]() ![]() ![]() It sounds promising and I hope to see more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wonder what going to happen next |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow... that waz amazing! |
![]() ![]() I've read several(if not ALL) alternatives to season 3, and let me tell you this: Your story is one of the most well written out there, keeping the characters in character and making the plot believable (I love it that you're not rushing Aang and Toph's romance. Depite being a loyal supporter of Taang, I hate it when they just suddenly fall in love) KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! :) |