Reviews for 1 Breaks Your Heart, But Can Another Fix It?
SheWolfMedjai chapter 17 . 7/1
Haha and this is why we love Peter and Charlotte!
SheWolfMedjai chapter 9 . 7/1
"Nice knowing you lads..." Brilliant absolutely brilliant!
SheWolfMedjai chapter 2 . 7/1
That alibi lol that was brilliant! The wording could not be better and closer to the way Charlie would have spoken it! Loving this can't wait to continue!
Guest chapter 11 . 6/29
I think your writing is well done. Keep writing and don't let anyone compromise your works. 2nd) I see no grammatical errors. I plan to look for other writings that you'very done. Again; Well done.
Your fan, Preaching Papa
Reader chapter 32 . 1/6
The story needs a beta , not only for the spelling and grammar but also for the mistakes in your story line. For example in the beginning you wrote that Jasper and Alice were never mates only companions and they were aware of that and broke up rather peacefully. Later you decided to make Alice the villain and you started writing about her having been deceiving Jasper, making him believe that they were mates and so on. Or when Jasper goes missing. Forks is pretty close to Canadian border so saying that he went half way to Canada doesn't really say much,it definitely wouldn't t take him a week to get to Canada, more like minutes with vampire speed if Jasper was willing to swim that is. Or the situation with Jacob. The whole Jacob and Bella becoming best friends and him falling in love with her happened in New moon therefore it never happened in your story. So writing jealous Jacob (you even wrote in one chapter that Bella supposedly told him many times that they could never be since she was not his imprint) makes no sense. She never become best friends with him in your story, she never befriended the pack in your story, she doesn't know details about being shifter, about imprinting and such , there would be no reason for the pack to even get engaged in the story. You just write whatever you feel like writing whether it makes sense or not.
Basically there's a lot of spelling mishaps, a lot of immature dialogs with a ' whore' being your favorite word it seems, a lot of illogical situations and contradictive statements in the story. It has potential but you worked hard to successfully f# it up
celajwhitney chapter 25 . 12/30/2017
must have been alice passing notes to slutoria. i hope bella claws edwards face and then spits on it!
celajwhitney chapter 15 . 12/30/2017
jasper drives a jaguar? is it a red one like mine?
celajwhitney chapter 9 . 12/30/2017
bad doggie, no bone for you! apparently the tribal legends didn't tell the pack that the treaty was to protect THEM from the vampires, NOT to protect the vampires from them!
suziq968 chapter 28 . 11/8/2017
Yeah, so someone needs to kill a bitch. Sorry for Demetrius, but hopefully they hadn't actually bonded?
suziq968 chapter 23 . 11/8/2017
Definitely need to burn at least parts of Edward. Granted, he apparently didn't know Bella was Jasper's mate, but he still killed her. Dipshit, maybe they could start with toes, he could learn to walk without those. Personally, I think his penis should go first, not like he ever uses it.
suziq968 chapter 18 . 11/8/2017
Wow, teasing death by stupidity. I wonder if any of them will ever realize how close they came to dying by dismemberment. Prolly wouldn't have even bothered to eat any of them, stupid could be catching after all.
summerlily232 chapter 32 . 10/15/2017
Amazing ending!
summerlily232 chapter 31 . 10/15/2017
Wonderful chapter! Loved it!
summerlily232 chapter 30 . 10/15/2017
Excellent
summerlily232 chapter 29 . 10/15/2017
Stupid Alice!
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