Reviews for One Twentieth of a Whole
dag419901 chapter 16 . 7/29/2023
I'm dropping this book because I've just lost interest in reading it and I can basically tell how it's gonna go, Naruto is gonna have a few run ins with the Akatsuki and either win or escape after which he will gather all the tailed beasts except the nine tails when he gets to the nine tails he'll be surprised because it was the nine tails plan all along to have Naruto gather the Chakra of the other tailed beasts to finally take all of Naruto's Chakra and become the new Juubi, a fight will follow Naruto will eventually win after a close call and either after he wins or at some point during the Journey he'll reveal his hatred for his family he'll then forgive them after a truly 'heart warming' (read sappy) scene yay Naruto is strong, he eventually gets together with Hinata the end.
Jpx0999 chapter 6 . 4/18/2023

my heart hurts... and that means you managed to create good drama
Guest chapter 20 . 2/2/2023
This is so stupid
Videl chapter 7 . 8/24/2022
For the amount of shit you talked about cliches and other fan fictions this was completely trash terrible writing with a ungodly amount of plot holes and I would even have been upset if again you didn’t talk so much shit about other fanfics.
Jon1234 chapter 7 . 7/25/2022
Why didn’t he go to the mind readers to help him through the trauma he went through at two, especially with Kage level parents. All I can say is this yellow flash and hobanero are terrible parents that did nothing to help there son
kingdrego17 chapter 2 . 5/5/2022
naruto turned down training are u stupid he's the so of the yellow flash meaning his life is always in danger and he doesn't know this and turned down training when he could be assassinated at any given moment by spies
kingdrego17 chapter 4 . 5/5/2022
so naruto is hinata and his sister is naruto wow original
Guest chapter 5 . 4/14/2022
You made Naruto a bitch
Hyperman15 chapter 6 . 3/3/2022
Minato’s father must have been Ash Ketchum...
izanagipsychoo chapter 8 . 2/11/2022
Mother fuck what kind of story is this? Story support to be Naruto not namikaza family
izanagipsychoo chapter 7 . 2/11/2022
Fuck up
Soul-Seeker-1406 chapter 5 . 8/8/2021
You know, just offering to train him similarly doesn't make him less neglectful if he can't even see how Naruto was beat up by bullies. Sure, Naruto tried to hide it from them, but like you said he's still a seven year old while Minato is like one of the most-astute ninja Konoha has ever produced, so he should've been able to notice that even with Naruto trying to hide it.
Guest chapter 5 . 7/12/2021
Are they no anbu protecting the hokage kid ? Or you are just retard like that
Hybridiaydeb chapter 4 . 1/16/2021
Why is he so weak this is bullshit
Pimity chapter 5 . 12/27/2020
The only thing i can say is, this is an immense dissapointment. Amenaza was great, but this? This is trash.
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