|Reviews for Lucky Harry|
| girlslovegirlswholovegirls chapter 15 . 13h
Love it. Amazing writing.
| Reader chapter 7 . 5/16
This is good, but you made a number of mistakes. Forgoing the missing words, you screwed up on spells. Expelliarmus is a wave of magical force, which is shown as distortions. The only crimson spell I know of is the Stunner, Stupify. (funny joke: Ron, Lockhart, Malfoy and most adult witches and wizards must have gone through a forest of Stupifies, if you catch my drift)
Again, this is a great fic, but you made a lot of errors, both writing and fact errors.
Final bit: do you have something against male genitalia? Well, at least it isn't like 'In this world and the next, where Ron's genitals became so battered that the healers had no choice but to turn him into a woman.
Oh, you gave my friend a very dangerous idea. He said he's going to make a fic where Fate, the goddess, is literally Harry's bitch.
| Bearmauls chapter 1 . 5/9
Felt a bit rushed, especially in terms of the Delacours getting Harry. Usually one can't abscond from a hospital with a child, even if they helped rescue said child. Especially if they then take him off to another country.
The Fleur/Harry relationship also kinda happened in the space of a paragraph.
Granted, some of this could be explained by the luck rune (and the idea of bone break patterns creating a rune is pretty interesting) but it does mean you robbed the characters of some development time.
| Guest chapter 14 . 5/2
Well done a very good story
| davycrockett100 chapter 15 . 4/16
| automaton14 chapter 7 . 4/12
maybe instead of just deleting the cut parts, you could let readers know that you deleted something, and maybe summarize it. That's super shitty storytelling to suddenly jump contexts without warning or anything.
| Spazzman29 chapter 15 . 4/5
Can't really say i enjoyed this. I know its a parody but none of the characters acted like themselves. Hermione was a lot more annoying than i normally found her yet she reaped all the benefits without committing to anything which makes her seem above all the others even though Fleur is supposed to be the alpha. There was no reason to omit Gabrielle at all and what happened to Sirius? He got his freedom then didn't show up in the story again. There are so many loose ends that weren't tied up and the ending was just crappy.
| Spazzman29 chapter 8 . 4/5
You've somehow made Hermione more annoying than she already is. This story would be better without her in it at all.
| Reader chapter 15 . 3/23
Naked and tanned Fleur and Nymphadora... (Goes to a very happy place, where Tonks can't find him to scream at the use of her first name)
| Reader chapter 14 . 3/23
INbreeding. Interbreeding may mean the same thing, but it mostly means to breed with other species.
| Reader chapter 13 . 3/23
A ton is 'beyond super human?' Batman can bench a ton as well and he's considered 'peak human,' as in the highest condition a human can obtain before passing beyond human limits. 'Super human' is like several tons, not a single one. 'Beyond superhuman' is Superman, meaning Harry would bench press Hogwarts with little strain.
I like this story, but you derail sometimes or spout a bit of misinformation here and there.
| ExceleXKurokami chapter 2 . 3/22
What do you have with people's balls being bashed?! Also, hats off to Pompfrey for the quip of the century!
Guess that means Neville's no longer going to fear the potion master.
| Bombzkid chapter 14 . 3/10
s GH ccdf, BC
| harvald chapter 3 . 2/22
Nice story but you should sometimes consider if the used words are appropriate. In chapter 3 you have Ron heavily insulting padma, because of skin color and then harry consoling her that it makes her more beautiful,but in that scence he says she is from a different "race",which is incorrect and even highly offensive. The Nazis in Germany under Adolf Hitler justified in their delusional propaganda killing of the Jews because they are of an inferior race to the arians(white people with blue eyes and blonde hair, which in fact are results of recessive genetic mutations)
So I have to ask if she isn't human ( example of a race), because of her skin color what is she a donkey ( example of a race) ?
All in all I like the story and am in fact rereading it.
with best regards,
P.s. please for future readers try to correct this mistake
| Guest chapter 15 . 1/29
Bwahahah this was actually pretty good