|Reviews for Spiral Heart|
| toofine89 chapter 7 . 5/4
Excellent plot and a unique pairing. I'll love more if you ever update.
| Guest chapter 1 . 4/28
you say harems are unrealistic... history will prove that statement complete bullshit after all through out history many notable historical figures had real harems, so you saying its unrealistic only proves your a ignorant moron, if harems are irrealistic then what is realistic about the fact that they are ninja that can use jutsu that basicly makes the superhuman in many cases... in short your a fuck up and i dont read fucktard idiot stories... now that ive said my peace fuck off and die
| Guest chapter 4 . 5/13/2014
Dude, a clan is not like relatives. It's more like a tribe. A clan might not be any different genetically than the people in a village before modern transportation. Genetically anything past first cousins doesn't really matter. Anyway while not going with an Uzumaki revival disappointed me, what killed the fic for me was how ridiculous it played the jump to Karin/Naruto. I stopped reading after he left Hinata not so much because he didn't go with her but the lame way it happened. He's never had a girlfriend. He likes Hinata a lot. He knows her. The issue in this fic is not described as physical attraction so instead of dating both at least a time or two he never even tries with her and instead is suddenly in a strong relationship with a girl that he's basically known for about a week. Absurd is how it came across.
| Scoobygirl45 chapter 7 . 3/16/2014
Love how the story is going, Sakura's mental breakdown was a little surprising, will her and tayuna be getting together? Can't wait to read more :)!
| gottahavekyuubi chapter 7 . 9/21/2013
This is probably one of the best reads I've had in a long while! Thank you for this literary masterpiece
| BanannahHair chapter 7 . 9/5/2013
So, I've finally read through your newest update.
I always hesitate to read an update, because your stuff is damn good, but sometimes I get that feeling that I wont see any progress for some time, that I should just wait it out until you sort out whatever keeps you pretty busy or decide to call quits.
You've breathed life into Karin, and I can't forgive you for that. No one else in fanfiction is trying to do fanfiction with Karin. They actually just create a copy Hinata, Sakura, or even a Kushina-lite, and call it Karin. You've payed attention to her mannerisms and speech patterns that endears the character to the audience. It's awesome to read. And you've managed to incorporate her into the main character's life without some huge plot device.
The Sakura subplot had its own interesting anecdotes and twists. Each sannin disciple is backing their own beliefs, seeking power for their own reasons. Sakura is important to the plot?! Yeah the leaving of Konoha was a bit of stretch, but things where glossed over enough in cannon after her big chance to stab Sasuke. I do wonder how you will distinguish the curse-seal stuff after its been revealed to be a play on the same Natural Energy Naruto uses for sage mode.
So yeah anyway, Sakura becomes some lesbian hell-bent on personal power, and Sasuke is his pre-Edo-Itachi self in all of his self righteous glory! It's fun to see how you pull the plot strings! Best of all, Naruto is cannon!Naruto! It's always a plus to come across a fic that isn't hellbound to change his orange cloths or make him start reading books in a library to make him magically better at being a person. They all fail because they completely disregard Naruto's own character mannerisms and characteristics. Unlike Spiral Heart, which marries the character template to the plot. Even the minor characters get their moments, and everything feels like a solid diversion to the actual cannon plot. It a fun story.
Except your story only teases. Cannon likes to give us only tiny bights of content once a week. Spiral Heart only likes to share once a year. Tiny bights blow, but starving sucks! Please update soon :O
Anyhow, looking forward to the next chapter! With Konan getting a chance to live, she is a big game changer. Kurama is on the friends list now too, which means that Naruto is a walking, talking WMD. And Akatsuki wants to play the covert game, plenty of chances for Sasuke to see Naruto and Sakura now that hes running around all over the place. Looking forward to how you handle the rampant Edo-tensai and armies of Zetzu later on down the road.
| Guest chapter 7 . 8/4/2013
I love this story keep it up , though its a little weird having kurama speaking out of narutos mouth , but thats just a nitpick really though continue the story
| Nymphadora Jackson chapter 7 . 7/30/2013
| Pyrrhos chapter 7 . 7/19/2013
I love that Kurama's first action after being given control is to tell off Bee.
The relationships between your characters seem very natural, from the way Naruto and Kurama interact to the development of the relationship between Naruto and Karin.
| T-B-R chapter 7 . 7/9/2013
Awesome, I like the double speak Naruto/Kurama have going on, and I like the real form of Naruto/Kurama's Transformation, not that golden yang chakra shit.
| Advent of Shadows chapter 4 . 7/2/2013
And now I'm done reading this story. I like Naruto/Karin because of the fact that they are descendents of the Uzumaki clan. Taking that away from Karin makes it far less interesting in my opinion.
| Kiminavi chapter 7 . 7/2/2013
I started reading this story later on, and to be honest I havent watched or read any Naruto since I was a kid, but this is really fun! I can follow along and njoy the story just based on how it's written which I find really phenominal. Please keep doing your best on your story, I always can't wait to read more! I think you have these characters fleshed out very well and it makes me happy to see them interact in the ways they do. One of my favorite parts is Gaara and Hinata, and even though i was a hardcore naruhina fan when i did watch the show I still think these two are adorable together! Keep up the great work!
| A-01 chapter 7 . 6/25/2013
This has been a really interesting and fun story to read. Not much more that I can say in negative or positive. So I look forward to more :)
| steven.white06 chapter 7 . 6/25/2013
| firetemplar415 chapter 7 . 6/25/2013
Really liking the story lots of twists and turns.
Saddened with the hinata runway action...while the garaaxhinata thing, even though its odd honestly...I'll keep an open mind for it.
Sooo, im sure you gotten this already asked, tayuyaxsakura...something is them right? Or will in future?
Keep up the great story.