|Reviews for We Win|
| LaH Carabele chapter 1 . 11/11/2010
Well done little vignette! No one should ever underestimate Napoleon when he is dead serious about saving his partner.
One spelling note: It should be truth "serum", not syrum.
Also, in the final paragraph, the "Is she dead?" should be separated from the rest of that paragraph as that statement is being made by Illya while the remainder of the paragraph has to do with Napoleon's actions/thoughts.
There is an old rule in writing: Never mix in the same paragraph the words of one speaker with the direct thoughts/actions of another character. (It goes along the same lines of the spoken words of different characters should never be placed in the same paragraph. If more then one character has something to say in a verbal exchange, each character's remarks should be placed in a separate paragraph.)
| PACTNMMT chapter 1 . 11/10/2010
Nicely done! Concise without sacrificing details (something that I have not learned yet...lol). Poor IK, will he ever trust another woman?