Reviews for Not Just Another Fake Boyfriend Story
Guest chapter 44 . 7/11
i have bee aobbing since like 35ish. omg. i tofally love the subplota etc. *criss more*

okay bye now
SakuraMinamino chapter 3 . 11/7/2015
I think you broke my heart. Itachi an asshole (and it doesn't look like it will get better). A really big one at that. If the situation with Gaara and the condoms wasn't so funny, it would be hard for me to read. Granted it would take a major rewrite if you changed it now an I don't expect you to do that. Also, more of that random switch to first person pov in the middle of the story. actually sentences now. So I'm guessing it originally was in first person after all. Also, Sasuke's birthday is in July . . . yeah I'm nitpicking but it would happen to anyone if you watched 4 straight hours of cinema sins.

Still written well despite the errors and definitely funny.
SakuraMinamino chapter 2 . 11/7/2015
Jiraiya's class had me in side stitches. Only problem with this chapter is 1) Rhihanna, and 2) there were multiple places were you had me instead of him. It was like originally it was in first person and was switched to third person and forgot to change it, or you switched randomly to first person. So it should have been Sakura said from behind him (Sasuke), instead of Sakura said from behind me. I counted I think four places where that happened. Great otherwise. It's funny.
SakuraMinamino chapter 1 . 11/7/2015
It's a great start. Very well written, great transitions, and descriptive. The problem plot wise is if it take place in America, you should have probably used English names instead of more Japanese ones for Sasuke's fangirl's at least. Also using Ero-sennin (or was it sensei), just keeps adding to the feel that this is really taking place in Japan and confusing everyone else when you mention driving (since Japanese high school students don't drive) and the only thing really hitting home that it's in America is the history project, so I would try to give the story more Japanese element or eliminate it besides keeping the names obviously.

My own personal problem with the story and that is because of difference of opinions rather than your skill as an author, is why does Itachi have to be an ass? He's such a sweet older brother. Don't get me wrong, I love Itachi teasing and mildly torturing his brother like any big brother should, but I get the feeling he's not really doing it out of sweet brotherly affection given Sasuke's statement that Itachi couldn't care less what he did. Itachi is personally one of my favorite characters and one of the few times I cried in the series when I watched his back story and watched him die (twice cause kishimoto is evil!). So yeah, not on you, just me. Here's hoping he gets better.
DamaruxXxKitsune chapter 10 . 11/2/2015
Hello, your fic was recommended to me and believe me when I say I'd cried at work on this chapter. Im loving it so far, even though it's so heart wrenching but it's awesome. Who doesn't love a little heart string tugging fic.
CryWrecker chapter 5 . 10/22/2015
as a Jewish person I must say I never laughed so hard at my own religion, and I usually hate when it's involved in fanfics, but I love this story so much
god bless you this is amazing
Guest chapter 24 . 6/27/2015
Did you get the name Akihiko from an anime?
MisheruFAD chapter 17 . 6/13/2015
Yikes. I tried to finish this but only got to chapter 17.
Ahh, I had trouble keeping up with your writing to be honest. There were many times where the perspective would be told in first person instead of third. That, and it felt as if I was reading two stories instead of one. For example, didn't Gaara have a thing for Lee? How could Sasuke not know when he's stated so beforehand? I don't know. It seemed like a third way in, you forgot the facts of your characters along with the storyline.
You kept me in for a bit, but just re-read your fics a few times to ensure there aren't any mistakes.
Guest chapter 28 . 3/5/2015
"It was practically rape"?!
Just- HOWWWWW
It. Wasn't.
It may be a mistake done knowingly, but wtf no it wasn't "rape" Neji.
Guest chapter 38 . 3/1/2015
This is an AMAZING story and I loved it until the whole Neji x Sakura thing started going - I know its already finished but kind of begging for it not to continue. *crosses fingers*
xNoonecaresx chapter 2 . 2/9/2015
Hey, I really like your story so far!
But there is one thing that really bothers me.
You often use "me" instead of "his", although your FF is in narrators perspective.
Isn't that wrong? English is not my native tongue, so sorry if it is correct, though.
However, good job! :)
Guest chapter 1 . 12/7/2014
Your fucked in the head
KuroNeko35 chapter 1 . 11/26/2014
I love this story, when I showed my friend she fell in love with it too :) she doesn't even like fanfiction so that's saying something...
Good Job! We both can't wait for the sequel!
AzucenaXshadows chapter 45 . 10/21/2014
Finally after 3 days of reading this, I'm done!
Oh god was that a roller coaster of emotions!
I applause u for such a unique story.
U did a wonder full job and I thank u for writing this a sharing.
Blood Ice Dragon Slayer chapter 45 . 10/13/2014
There are no words to describe how much I fucking enjoyed this story! Like, seriously, you should publish it! Also, what happened with Gaara and Kiba?! They were/are so cute together! This story was so good!
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