Reviews for First
Super Paper chapter 1 . 1/1/2011
I like the way you write the emotions. In the usual smutfics everything goes naturally, but you showed that there are also people that aren't experienced, and that sex can be a bit awkward. Well done! ;)
skywolf666 chapter 1 . 11/13/2010
Hehe. Smut is... sadly, one of my favourite types of stories. I'm a naughty little girl... I wish I could write smut like you do... It's such an amazing fic that leaves so much to the imagination but keeps it all within the realm of realism. I mean, Jessica's hesitancy and Yoshiya's embarrassment and shame... All of it was so in-character that I actually could see this as being their first time in Umineko. (happy fangirl sigh) Ahh... Stop being better than me. XD You're forcing me to improve!

Kirino chapter 1 . 11/13/2010
The limey conclusion. Cute, well done, doesn't reek of "insert tab A into slot B" via omission of the precise actions done.