|Reviews for Ghosts of the past|
| BiJane chapter 4 . 12/19/2010
Nice way to continue the storyline, and it's quite impressive how the characters fit together. I especially like Fudge's bit. The 'insolent monkey' lien particularly.
main issue is probably because you haven't written for a while, things are blurring together, and a few bits are disfluent. Also, try not to do constant dialogue, line after line. I've had phases like that sometimes, it's a pain but my advice would be to try and stop at the scene changes, write movement or setting-description fillers.
| BiJane chapter 3 . 11/19/2010
Intriguing again, good storyline intro too. So Lockhart's still with Kuja? Good job, never liked him, and it works really well to have an HP character ongoing with Kuja too.
Good job again.
| BiJane chapter 2 . 11/17/2010
Interesting, Harry choosing Snake's place on the Knight Bus. shows their friendship pretty well.
| BiJane chapter 1 . 11/15/2010
Ooh, interesting start.
Skeleton mask? Death eater or just mugger?
Hmm, anyway, intriguing again. Snake's scar huh? Sounds like Kuja or something if it's that scar. Hmm...great start.