|Reviews for Daisy Dursley|
| Guest chapter 10 . 12/29/2013
The prices on most of this are out of whack. It would never cost £25 for 3 packs of underwear, it would cost about £10. Plus, in England tax is almost always included in the price shown, so you don't actually have to add any.
| Valentina Alexandrea Sparrow chapter 17 . 12/12/2013
More we pleasee I lovee it
| Nayeli Clearwater chapter 8 . 11/17/2013
Okay, so Daisy's a redhead.
Will she have green eyes too?
| Nayeli Clearwater chapter 2 . 11/17/2013
Since Daisy inherited her Aunt Lily's red hair, will she also have her Aunt Lily's emerald eyes?
| Katiebug14 chapter 17 . 9/2/2013
I love it :) I can't wait to see what house the boys will be sorted in :)
| luv-my-pug-roni2010 chapter 17 . 8/22/2013
Love the drama chapie.. great detail.. looking forward to seeing who will appear in the upcoming chapies bravo! have a great day!
| Anarra chapter 17 . 7/28/2013
long chapter, but i like the movement of the plot. update soon.
| Savage Amazon chapter 7 . 7/24/2013
There's a few things that give youh away as an american, besides your english.
One, the usa is huge and each state has it's own state taxes while the produts price is basically the same, that's why state taxes are added at the cash register, in england and most if notg all of europe, the state taxe ared already included in the price, so what you see is what you pay.
Also, your mesuring is wrong for europe. We don't do pounds and ounces, we use kilos and grams mesurements.
It's nt reallyh a criticism, jst letting you knows some facts
| Savita chapter 17 . 7/19/2013
something tells me you are determined to put harry in slytherin..(i hope its not though), but pleeeeease keep the weasleys, hermoine and maconagall involved in the story...
| Angel JJK chapter 17 . 7/18/2013
What a trial. Hope that Moody and Poppy get to keep them. Maybe Harry's testimony will make Lucius think about his ways. Til next time.
| KJPotter chapter 13 . 7/18/2013
Nice. I like this chapter. I wonder if Poppy will be their permanent caretaker. And I love that you made Poppy the caretaker, too. I've never seen a story with her as the guardian, but it makes sense. I'll be interested to see the transition of Harry from parent back into the kid he is, especially at Hogwarts.
But there is one glaring error that I have seen repeated throughout the story: the spelling of staring. Starring, with two r's, means featuring, as in a movie: "Angelina Jolie is starring in this summer's new blockbuster movie." Staring, with one r, means looking at intently for a prolonged time: "Should I call the cops? That creepy dude over there is staring at me."
| ultima-owner chapter 17 . 7/17/2013
the trial had me crying
| KJPotter chapter 12 . 7/17/2013
Yeah! We're at Hogwarts and the story is finally starting to pick up the pace and get interesting. (This is of course your story, but I would highly recommend you revise the chapters where you repeat precisely what was bought and for how much and where. We don't need that info. The gist would be acceptable, and it would be more palatable to focus more on emotions and char dev than purchases.) This chapter is much better as we get to see the character of Poppy emerge. I'm happy to see it too, as even JKRowling paints Poppy as a flat, unchanging character.
| Guest chapter 17 . 7/17/2013
word words word too many words. get to the point don't talk around it
| NoNeedForAName chapter 13 . 7/17/2013
some of your dialog is a bit verbose. Be careful not to overkill the story with too many details. On the other hand, it’s even worse to not give enough detail. Make it a happy medium, and give enough to get the point made (same goes for dialog), but not so much that a whole new story can be written about the description of number four Privet Drive and the weather. you could probably cut most of the chapter out and it would be a better read. you have a tendency to draw out the scenes too long some can be cut out altogether.