Reviews for First Date
VirReturnsFromMinbar chapter 1 . 11/24/2021
Great story.
PARAdoxial chapter 1 . 3/12/2012
do you know how much i loved reading this?

ah~artemis first fictional love

OC is not sue-ish (there's a test for that)

artemis is as in character as you can make him for an artemis in love-same vocabulary, mannerisms, but the apologizing part was somewhat OOC
artificialGenius chapter 1 . 12/22/2011
This is so adorable, I've seen your art on dA and it's equally adorable~ I think you did a good job of not making Victoria a Mary-Sue.
Daria Falke chapter 1 . 10/28/2011
Ah! I love this! I've been reading The Artist and the Hunter on DA and I can't wait for the next installment. This is excellently written, and I loved the part where Artemis apologized. :) Good job.
Spring Sunrise chapter 1 . 12/30/2010
Is Victoria a Mary-Sue? Let's see, what are some usual signs of a Mary-Sue in the Artemis Fowl fandom?

Beautiful- No

Genius- No

Knowledgeable about the People- No

Half-fairy, especially elf- No

Unexplained powers- No

Is based on the author- Yes

Is American- Yes

Exchange student at St. Bartelby's- No

Based on the author- Yes

Amazing/ridiculous name- No

Tragic past- No

Sings well- No

I'm too lazy to list them all. Overall, she's not a Mary-Sue. It's near-impossible to write an OC who is 100% not a Mary-Sue, so don't worry if she has a couple of Mary-Suelike qualities. Everything else that I would put in thie review has been said by OceanWater.
the wise and the brave chapter 1 . 11/28/2010
Victoria doesn't seem really Sueish her character could be better.

Artemis is a bit OOC.

Several grammar mistakes.

Plot is a bit cliche.

The flow of the story seems a bit off.

But was okay.
shyjedi chapter 1 . 11/26/2010
Nice job. Your character is definitely not a sue, but that's probably because you based her off yourself. But hey, whatever works. I enjoyed it.

And Incendiarist, just because she made a few minor puctuation and capitalization mistakes doesn't mean her sentence structure is "horrid". As long as the story flowed well, which it did, I woud say her sentence structure is fine for a casual fanfiction.
rainbowspring chapter 1 . 11/26/2010
I really like your oc and the story is really funny!
RAHbooks chapter 1 . 11/24/2010
I would like to see more of Victoria, she has to find out about fairies eventually after all and it would be fun to see how she reacts. I think you accomplised your goal.
Incendiarist chapter 1 . 11/23/2010

That was... interesting, to say the least. It's a cute idea, though the story itself is slightly less than satisfactory. It is definitely fluffy, though.

Now, your sentence structure is horrid. I apologise to be so blunt about it, but sadly, you, along with a half a billion other people on this site, do not use such wonderful inventions as the comma and capital letter correctly. As a simple correction/example: 'Yeah,' The American grinned, snagging a cookie as she walked by. This should be: 'Yeah,' the American grinned, snagging a cookie as she walked by. Understood?

Artemis is Irish, as you know. Ireland's currency is the euro (), not the American dollar ($). And also, in Ireland, you don't say 'mom'. You will say either 'mum' or 'mam' (it depends on the exact location, but 'mum' is the more likely culprit.).

Victoria doesn't seem like an uber!Sue, though it's a bit confusing. If she's American, how did they meet? How did they start dating? Et cetera.

Videri quam esse.
BackToBlonde chapter 1 . 11/23/2010
this is really good :D

victoria definetly isnt a sue and its oh so fluffy!

i would have to say that Artemis seems a little OOC but thats only to be expected when writing this type of fic.

i am hoping there will be another chapter, please write one! _
Forever Day chapter 1 . 11/23/2010
Despite the summary, I found Victoria a little Sueish but she got more interesting as it went on. Artemis was also OOC, joking around just doesn't seem quite like him. Now I think about it, Victoria wasn't actually that bad, it was mainly the way Artemis acted.

But I loved the fluffiness of it (and now I want to go watch the movie.) Fix Artemis and this could be really good.
Aggressively Hospitable chapter 1 . 11/23/2010
OH MY GOD! THIS IS AWESOME! i love it i love it i love it!
Elliee chapter 1 . 11/23/2010
About the AF being real... so do I! Lol. xxx

Anyways... this is really good! I love it! Your not making your OC too amazing like some do, and your really making quite a mischeivous (Spelt right?) charactor out of her. :D Keep on writing. I'll be keeping an eye on this onexxx

Oh, BTW, I couln't find ANY typos! (I don't think)! Well done!