Reviews for Ice Cream Tears
becsti chapter 1 . 6/28/2012
very poignant.
There isn't much on Uriel and I'm glad to see you did such a good job!
Ella Greggs chapter 1 . 1/30/2011
This was a very interesting introspection, with some excellent lyrical elements. You have a good sense of poetic rhythm and forward momentum in your writing. I liked how you quickly and efficiently gave us portraits of so many characters in the park, using small details to flesh them out. My only criticism would be that the shift from past- to present-tense in the line: "he knows the earth continues to rotate. And ice cream continues to melt" is jarring. If you put it in the past-tense, it would blend with the rest of the prose. Lovely last line and last image: ice cream crying for a sad angel.
DeanCasLover22 chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
Cudos for you making me sympathetic for Uriel. That takes a good bit of effort.
archard-winchester chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
sarcastic doctor on tv. Is that a house reference?
happyday girl chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
awww the ending was really sad and poignant!

I love that little metaphor at the end, that you can always tell when an angel is sad when an ice cream melts!

great work!

happyday girl