So, I am a complete twat and haven't read your stories, but I am remedying that and I have to say this is fantastic! The girls death is like, WHOA! I was there and I felt it. Well done you! Keep writing, you're good at it if you can pack this much oomph onto something so brief as that first paragraph.

Now I am going to go read your other Sherlock fic...

Keep it up!

TTFN,

Told you I was reading and reviewing! Hadn't read this piece yet. Was it your first Sherlock one? Judging by the note at the end I would hazard a guess to that effect. Anyway, really liked it. Your description of Donovan's 'dry voice' was good word choice. The beginning was very good indeed - from the victim's point of view. I hope, were you to expand this, that you would continue to have bits from the dead victim's point of view, as it strikes me as quite an original take on a Sherlock fic. Just one point - you refer to John as 'Watson' at one point in the narrative, but I think you were aware of that, since you refered to him soon afterwards as 'John Watson'. And Sherlock's quick fire deduction about Donovan was believable and well thought out. Fun and interestin to read :)

I llike it, I am looking forward to reading more of your work

Very interesting :)

I think this would make a really good story, if you so choose to keep going with it.

Because I am really curious to see what its all about, I like the characterisations and the tone of the story. Yes, it could be very intriguing indeed!