Reviews for Foil
Icy199513 chapter 1 . 12/18/2010
Wow nice writing in dave's point, thats a first that i've seen so far. Keep writing! it's wonderful
PowerLad chapter 1 . 11/27/2010
great story
Dreaming-Of-A-Nightmare chapter 1 . 11/26/2010
oooh, this gave me some damn good chills. and it was so /accurate/, in that in-character way. and it was kinda dark-thoughted and dirty, but i liiiked it. D;
dorydafish chapter 1 . 11/26/2010
Aww i could totally imagine dave thinking everything u wrote down. It was amazingly in character. I love the fact karofsky thinks finn is in love with kurt. And i love how he clearly likes kurt but can't admit it, even to himself.

Good job!

I hope u write more karofsky/kurt, u have a nack.

DDF

XXX
dorydafish chapter 1 . 11/26/2010
Aww i could totally imagine dave thinking everything u wrote down. It was amazingly in character. I love the fact karofsky thinks finn is in love with kurt. And i love how he clearly likes kurt but can't admit it, even to himself.

Good job!

I hope u write more karofsky/kurt, u have a nack.

DDF

XXX
Nemo120 chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
Thank you so much for writing this! I was hoping someone would write a fic about WTF was going on inside Karofsky's brain during that scene. Great job at staying in character.
Syranda chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
This is absolutely brilliant. Hope you expand on it!
PuddingPopCake chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
Very well done and sexy...
ColouredRose chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
Hahahahahahahaha, I know this is a drama, but jesus christ - it was sooo funny because you wrote Karofsky soooo well and in character. This is going on the favorites list.

My favorite line:

He can just imagine Hummel bending over for him, asking him to go slow – like Dave would. He'd fuck that sweet ass good and hard and Hummel'd love it; he'd beg for more–

Oh you write Karofsky so deliciously creepy and hot and well, haha in dennniaaaaalllll.

And I agree. Kurt could do better than Finn Hudson :p
hillabilla chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
he's so upset! a great character study, i can practically see these thoughts running through his mind...
Viviane Renard chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
You do a good internal monologue. My only constructive criticism is that, although I love everything you write, in my opinion you italicize too many words. It messes with the flow of your beautiful sentences (at least, it does for me when I'm reading it), and takes what should be a special emphasis and makes it into a regular writing tool.

Other than that, fantastic job. :)
Kindre Turnany chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
I've read so many "reformed Dave" (read:OOC) stories in the past couple of days that, honestly, it's awesome to see him being the jerk that he is. Not that I don't want him to stop being a jerk, but he feels very in character here, and that's awesome. :)
Ella Greggs chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
Okay, first off you need to up the rating on this to M for mature content. The language is pretty graphic. That said, it's an oddly compelling read, creepy and scary and fascinating in the same way that scene between Kurt and Karofsky itself was creepy and scary and fascinating all at once. I really liked how you had Karofsky's mind straying to the feelings he really has, but then pulling back to deny them. This was very well done and really interesting to read. Good job. So just up the rating in fairness to your readers. That's the only suggestion I'd make.
boldlikeblack chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
It's twisted, but it's Karofsky logic. It works. It's so much better than the whole thing just being epic rape face.
Forlorn Maiden chapter 1 . 11/25/2010
Oh my gosh! I love this! I can totally see Karofsky thinking these things during that scene in "Furt." I mean it can't just be a coincidence that he suddenly decided to intimidate Kurt like that after Finn left. He was jealous. When Karofsky saw Finn and Kurt dancing, before he made fun of them, he looked pissed. He had that "WTF are you doing w/ him" look toward Finn. And there really was no reason for Karofsky to take the cake topper-but he did. And like you wrote, I think he did it to have something of Kurt's, and the whole intimidating thing-man those eyes, it really did seem like he wanted to remind Kurt who he belonged to. GREAT JOB!
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