Reviews for The Hunted
Nathaniel999 chapter 5 . 12/22/2014
Your spelling, grammar, and overall writing are excellent! keep going! But I have to say the characterization is painful, You have made your OC far too powerful. One or two great abilities that give other characters trouble would work, when you make him powerful AND diverse you take away from the story in a major way.
Also you don't seem to have a good feel for personalities of the characters. I would try watching episodes or reading manga/comics just before or as you write the chapters and other stories in the future.
EX: Naruto seems to try and protect Sasuke at every turn. When in the show he never tried to protect him, only to assist and fight with/beside him. The point is he has never seen Sasuke as helpless like this story seems to suggest.
There are other examples as well but I think re watching key episodes and paying attention to not only the what but the why of the actions of the characters would improve this story greatly.
World Maker 777 chapter 2 . 9/26/2014
so are Naruto and Sasuke enemies now or are they friends?
person chapter 14 . 8/7/2014
Isn't this Naruto after Madara died? If so, he seems extremely weak! He's weaker than he was during the Sasuke retrieval ark!
Marethyu chapter 13 . 6/25/2014
Hell yeah I like the idea. Do it before I do.

I have become Death, Destroyer of Worlds

ps Marethyu means death
Super reader chapter 16 . 11/12/2013
Finally Sakura did something. Punch a door. Doesn't she do anything else?
Super reader chapter 3 . 11/12/2013
My favorite character(s)
Naruto: Sakura and Shikamaru, (yes, I like that lazy dude)
Teen Titans: Terra and Raven.
Superreaderextre chapter 2 . 11/12/2013
I like it, but are sakura and all the others going to be in it?
shugokage chapter 20 . 9/30/2013
Awesome story great job!
SakuraDreamerz chapter 20 . 9/29/2013
Whoooot! That was awesome! :D
SakuraDreamerz chapter 19 . 9/27/2013
Whoooot! :D Go guys! Slade got his butt kicked! XD
t chapter 8 . 6/2/2013
like it
SakuraDreamerz chapter 18 . 6/2/2013
Uh oh!
Seraphtor chapter 5 . 6/2/2013
There's some nerfing in there I know it. Nice fic though, becareful with hour OC though.
Seraphtor chapter 4 . 6/2/2013
why are you using anime Naruto...
Seraphtor chapter 2 . 6/2/2013
Is Naruto still gay for Sasuke...
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