|Reviews for Sand and leaves|
| Gaara yaoi love chapter 2 . 8/14/2013
I loved the story
| QueenWesker123 chapter 4 . 1/17/2012
I'm Soooo Glad They Got Revenge :D Keep Up The Amazing Work 3
Queenyy 3 xxxxxxxxxxxxx
| NaruSasuNaruLover chapter 1 . 1/9/2011
This is all meant to be constructive...I'm fine with rape stories, but really I don't understand why Sasuke's friends would rape the guy he likes...I mean once I read that i was just kind of uninterested in reading the rest...in reality most people aren't going to go along with raping someone, you can argue group thought can come into play and people will follow a leader, but probably not when it conflicts with their morals it's not as if they were in a riot and all following a person, they were talking about it and when rape came up someone probably would have stood up and said something about it, not to mention rape usually wouldn't be the first thing to come to mind, it would be beating the person up probably that would be mentioned instead...my problem with this story really is that it's unrealistic...I know that a story isn't supposed to completely mirror reality but you as a writer should still take into consideration how people would act when put into a situation...also your characters were out of character often, I mean Naruto suggesting rape? If you're going to make the fiction based on Naruto, even if it's AU, take into consideration what the characters are like and then you can tone them down a little but still stay as true as possible to the character and make the story more realistic and more like the characters they're supposed to be...also something to be aware of, when a new person talks it is best to move down to the next line rather than keeping a bunch of different people talking in the same paragraph. If you get too many people talking in one paragraph then you'll be much more likely to confuse your reader...Instead of putting just a bunch of talking in one paragraph, try adding some description as well to show their actions, spoken words can do a lot but it doesn't paint the entire picture...
| MizzDarknezz chapter 4 . 11/30/2010
lol great revenge..."What Can I say I get horny and i can't control myself" Gaara 's my favorite part. HAHA
| MizzDarknezz chapter 2 . 11/29/2010
OOO I did not see that coming. Nice job.
| mel-loves-rocklee chapter 2 . 11/29/2010
Kool story! Just a few grammer problems though, but apart from that its okay :) keep up the good work
| MizzDarknezz chapter 1 . 11/28/2010
I like the storyline and how this is going. Just a couple of things:
1. Can you explain why the friends are so curious and why they want to torture and rape Gaara?
2. Details on the rape scene. I have to agree with OneShotMarvel. There has to be a good rape scene.
3. There were some grammer errors. But its not so bad, ok.
good job. Keep it up.
| OneShotMarvel chapter 1 . 11/28/2010
What the heck? What kind of friends are you!
"And if he is?"
"We torture Gaara."
"We rape him."
WTF! Do you think Sasuke would appreciate you raping his boyfriend? Like...seriously? And poor Gaara! ;o; He's going to feel terrible when you guys rape him!You better not torture him with words too! I will hunt you down if you do! I won't complain about the rape too much, although I love and adore Gaara, but I do love a good rape scene XD lol
I hope Sasuke will like...idk...get to the scene in time to see it happen? Then he'll stop being friends with those dicks and help Gaara cope. Rather than not seeing it, contemplating what is wrong with Gaara, and then finding out from overhearing a conversation amongst his friends about it.
Anyhow! All that future rape stuff aside! I loved it! :D I hope you'll update again soon u Great job! d('-')b