Reviews for Bouncing 'Round the Room
cincgreenyahoo.com chapter 1 . 2/5/2001
Part 1 : "An excellent work, worth reading several times."

- cincgreen/sam_
modern beatnik chapter 2 . 1/30/2001
Very interesting and rather brilliant. I know your probaly hate hearing this but check your spelling. I didn't like how you spoiled the end of brave new world. But its interesting how its end the same BNW and in this, everything continues on undisterbed. Something about the drinking, the smoking ect, didn't seem to fit in right. You could've developed quinn more. I was hoping you would make discover her depth with the help of dave. But she seemed to be strugling with it. I still sense some love between dave and quinn. I woul suggest a sequal. But otherwise wonderful. Stay in touch
i write stupid fics chapter 2 . 1/30/2001
great!
Jody S chapter 2 . 1/30/2001
Man, I like this alot, despite the small font...you really give some depth into characters that I had never previously thought about...and while the "real" characters may not have reacted in exactly that way, I can certainly imagine them doing something simalar...interesting take on things, I must say. I couldn't stop reading.
Jody S chapter 1 . 1/30/2001
I like, I like...but BIGGER FONT, please! Most of us dont have microscopes handy near our computer for reading! Other than that, good )
Yogi chapter 1 . 11/7/2000
B
Yogi chapter 1 . 11/7/2000
B
Majestrix chapter 1 . 9/27/2000
Well written, and fun to read.
CINCGREEN chapter 1 . 9/25/2000
...and of course, it's another fine effort all around. A slow beginning, but

the conflict between Quinn and Dave was quite compelling, which ended the

way it most likely should have ended. You do need a spellchecker, though: before

you conclude that that's a whiny comment, it's probably my only complaint.

I'm not a fan of sequels at all, so I'm glad that "Busted Stuff" will focus

on some other part of this universe you've created. Dave's a great character,

so maybe we should see less of him in BS (what an unfortunate choice of

initials) so that we can really appreciate his future appearances. Excellent

job, and I eagerly await any follow-ups.
leann chapter 1 . 9/18/2000
yeah
SickSadDanielle chapter 1 . 9/17/2000
awesome cant wait to see the next part only hoping it isn't as long and if it is try to seperate it a little
LittleSister chapter 1 . 9/7/2000
i really enjoyed the story. it was well written and i can't wait for the next installment. and i have to add...woohoo! phish rules! :o)
ssd chapter 1 . 9/5/2000
you know cincgreen is really getting on my nerves because of unconsructive criticism anyways good story keep writing
Majestrix chapter 1 . 8/31/2000
Wonderfully engrossing, well written, and just amazing. You sound like a very intelligent person, and you should keep writing. Looking forward to the second part!
CINCGREEN chapter 1 . 8/30/2000
...well, it's a pretty clever story, so I'll answer the pretty

clever cry for feedback. The story appears to be a sequence

of events involving a new guy at Lawndale, these events connected

loosely and without a "plot". Most Daria fanfic writers would

turn that story into an abortion - there are so many places one

can go wrong. My first thought was "he's going to turn

into a member of the Daria/Jane clique and be more sarcastic

than the both of them" - I'm thinking of a certain bad fanfic

character whose name begins with "L". The second thought was

"he'll have some big secret which will be an attempt to force

the reader to love him or hate him". Instead, I was pleasantly

surprised. He had his faults and his good points, and his

personality was distinct enough to make him a character who

could stand on his own. The "big dramatic moment" about the

car crash was played matter of factly, without melodrama and

handled very well. Some of the parts of the story were a bit slow :

long conversations between characters - talking-heads scenes -

tend to slow things down. We can see how his world intersects

with the other characters and how it differs. One problem was

that he was quite well-off : it removes a bit of dramatic conflict

in that the character can always buy himself out of situations

(Backstreet Boys tix for the Fashioneers, for example). I'm no

Phish fan or tape head so I'd probably not hang around with him

at school or share any of his interests, but as a fictional

Daria-verse character, he's cool and more deserving of a "parallel

universe" than others. Tiffany as a possible pothead was a nice

touch. Most readers, in their heart of hearts, would not pass

up a date with the shallow Quinn Morgendorffer because she's cute

and has what boys like and I'm glad you explored that. Great work all

around, and I'll be looking for your other work around the net.
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