|Reviews for In Transit|
| OwensMama chapter 3 . 12/12/2010
Great stuff, really enjoying it.
| Kyuketsuki In Oki chapter 3 . 12/12/2010
It's hard to believe that this is only going to be seven chapters in total. I have a feeling that we're not going to want it to end, you know?
What a happy coincidence that Jasper & Edward just happened into the very same cafe where Bella works. I was wondering just how these two would end up ever speaking.
Thank God that Bella was the one who had the cajones to break the ice, yeah?
My heart fell when Bella boarded the bus and Edward didn't even look up. But, then when he moved to purposely sit next to her - well, now I'm starting to have some hope!
| Robin86 chapter 3 . 12/12/2010
Sweet chapter! I loved their interaction and the mystery still surrounding Edward’s situation makes me want to read more and more and more…I can’t wait for Wednesday!
| ChocolateLover82 chapter 3 . 12/12/2010
"I'd never been a judgmental kind of guy..." Shocking! LOL. I get that he does this becuse of his background, but he's back with the living and here everything is grey.
Glad they are giving each other a chance.
Spiderman comic book? LOL. Loved it.
| blondecowgirl865 chapter 3 . 12/12/2010
Aw, great chapter as always.
| Sunfeathers chapter 3 . 12/12/2010
Oh my goodness, that actually gave me chills! What a great ending to this chapter! :)
| Mo'Reading chapter 3 . 12/12/2010
So Edward ended up at the cafe where Bella works. I like that you gave her spunk, so that she gives Edward a run for his money.
At our veterans celebration at work, some of them talked about the demons they had to overlook daily to be able to function and how many of their compatriots were unable to beat them and committed suicide, they also asked all of us to start supporting Veteran causes to help those who came back mentally drained, exhausted and tormented so that we could repay them for shielding our eyes from it all.
"I'll, um...I guess I'll see you tomorrow. Bella." He said my name almost as an afterthought, but those five letters were so huge. Each one of them made a tiny dent in that wall that surrounded him, and I could see a little bit of what was hidden beneath shining through." - WHEN You wrote this where was your mind, I'm just wondering because it amazes me that you thought of adding the detail that Bella's name only had 5 letters, I actualy had to go back and count. No one ever does that they only say he said my name and it was the sweetest word I had ever heard coming out of his mouth or something like that. So it makes me curious as to just how into the character you were and where your imagination was, cause when I read it I can picture the whole back side of the counter and the cups and all that so to have all that distraction and then say "those 5 letters", it just amazes me.
| jansails chapter 3 . 12/12/2010
Oh, that was brilliant.
Way to make & break a character open.
| sscana chapter 3 . 12/12/2010
I really loved this chapter. He felt for her but was at a loss on how to communicate with her. Her saving him from Jasper was really sweet. She saw him drowning and helped him out. I'm sure Jasper ran straight out to call their brother. I'm so happy he hung around to really say thanks and talk with her. They both really need a friend. The ending was perfect. She was saddened he wasn't noticing her and he finally makes a move and talk with her. Loved that ending.
| Mo'Reading chapter 2 . 12/12/2010
Mhhh what was Armyward running from, and how come no one ever makes him a Jarhead or Airforce, you know sea legs would be nice too, I've seen picture of those guys on deck after a work out, Yummm?
| ECis4Me chapter 3 . 12/12/2010
I always have the hardest time putting in to words how your stories make me feel.
I love that she came to his rescue.
I really love that he had a comic at the end.
| Mo'Reading chapter 1 . 12/12/2010
Ooooh, Armyward, and he doesn't like attention, I like that. What happened to him that he has scars he tries to cover up, and how old is he? I see you still found a way to make him melancholic.
I've always wondered why guys stay with girls that are bitchy? Why would you do that to yourself it's hard enough to stay together when your both happy. Plus if you have a bad day out of the house when you get home who's gonna cheer you up not the bitchy partner?
| Ironic Twist chapter 3 . 12/12/2010
Ah, he learned a little something. A little escape in the form of a Spiderman comic.
| MsFunkyKitty chapter 3 . 12/12/2010
This chapter made me squee with joy! so great! I loved Bella saving Edward at the coffe shop and getting a chance to explain why she reads those mags..& Edward with the comic at the end? killed me! so sweet!
Cant wait to see what happens next.
| Just Me Alone chapter 3 . 12/12/2010
Good! I am so glad they finally talked and got some things out of the way...