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| TheVictoryAngelofStrife chapter 4 . 2/24/2012
From wat I can see, Harry is more open-minded (proof from his not wanting to not put all Slytherins into the "evil" label) and more willing to learn. So... his home life is not as bad as the canon then? Is he still sleeping in the cupboard or has Petunia actually given him the second bedroom? Sorry, but I hope u don't mind clearing up wat his home-life is like. Also, I'm still hanging on to this story since u said that this story would start to move away from canon. Looking forward to the next chp!
| Isys Luna Skeeter chapter 4 . 2/15/2012
i do like this story and i do hope to read more, i could easily see the diferences and i do hope to know more of the different harry
| Flying Chrissy chapter 4 . 2/9/2012
Interesting story! Look forward to the next update.
| Angelic Abomination chapter 4 . 2/8/2012
I like this and I don't understand why others are confused. I must admit that I skipped the canon. It is obvious which bits are yours and I am enjoying Harry not being so naive. I always thought that he would be more suspicous of people, especially adults. And Although he was longing to make friends I would have thought he would be more wary after his previous experiences growing up. Anyway, keep going, ignore those negative muggles and know that us select few who understand your intentions are eager for the next instalment.
| xXxMartelxXx chapter 4 . 1/20/2012
oh god why did this turn into a rant
TL;DR version: We need to see the changes happening with your own words; show us how Harry grew up differently and then take into account how those differences will change events in the plot! Don't post the same narration of the books! That's boring and bad form and takes away credibility from your AU.
If people are confused by your story, then you're not being clear and need to work on that, not start copy-pasting/transcribing whole chapters or passages from the book(s).
Solution: you could start the story by showing -not telling, by incorporating in the regular plot- the things you said in your point number fifth in the first chapter, thus fixing the problem in point number three.
In fanfiction, people assume that default is what we saw in canon. If people were confused by your earlier attempts, was it because you showed differences without warning before that it was an Alternate Universe instead of a Single Point of Divergence type of thing? I've noticed that that's usually the issue.
For example, say that I found a story with the premise that Harry was sorted into Slytherin. Okay, so I would go into the story expecting to see the different sorting being the only difference. Buuut, out of nowhere, other main characters are sorted differently without any reason. Also, other characters are suddenly aged differently. Oh, and now Harry is Draco's twin brother. But oddly enough, none of the plot form the first book changed! Weird, that.
These changes were neither noted before the story nor were they shocking plot twists. They just were there. That's confusing and a little alienating. There are so many different factors at play here, that it makes it hard to believe that the canon plot we saw in the books would remain the same. So, if you keep the "plot" the same, but pile on many changes at the same time, it's hard to take the story seriously, not to mention that, if we see no consequences of said changes, it becomes hard to keep track of all of them.
My example was an exaggeration and obviously isn't what happened with your story, but I hope it helped explain my point better.
All these gripes aside, it's never a good idea to post whole chapters from the books. It's infinitely better to take some paragraphs or even the whole prologue or introductory chapter to let your audience know -as seamlessly as you can, make it all a part of the story!- what happened in canon so that we know WHEN the divergences start kicking in and nobody is lost trying to keep up.
In the case of this story, since the divergences are Harry growing up a bit more distrusting and distant, we need to SEE him being distrusting and distant during his childhood, before Hogwarts.
Things simply can't happen exactly as they did in the book, since many of those events happened because Harry was naive and, while snarky and not exactly a pushover, he was always rather passive and more reactive than proactive.
That's why seeing the exact same words of the books happen after saying there were fundamental changes in Harry's character is jarring. It's not only a waste of word count and time -both yours and the reader, since we all know what happened in the book and there is no reason to read it again-, but it simply takes away credibility to the changes you are trying to introduce, and thus, your whole premise falls apart.
| Nasyki chapter 3 . 1/19/2012
Very disapointed so far, the summary sounded very good, and the first chapter got my hopes up. I know I am probably reiterating what other people are thinking, however, if you want to keep things cannon you should just take the ideas, and still rewrite them in your own words. I know that it isn't very interesting to rewrite things that have already happened...however it is far more interesting to read something that I have already read at least thirty times. If you need help trying to write something I suggest a beta, I am sure many would be glad to help. That is why people beta, afterall. I look forward to the next chapter, however if it is more of the same it will be my last. :( Happy writing.
| Guest chapter 3 . 1/19/2012
Do you really need to copy/paste those parts of the book? You could just skip them and then allude to them in your own narration just before showing us your plot; we all know what happened in the first book.
| Gemini Peverell chapter 3 . 1/19/2012
Hmmm... is there something different from canon? Looking forward to the next (less canon?) chapter!
| Gemini Peverell chapter 2 . 1/19/2012
Interesting summary, can't wait for the real stuff to begin! #_#
| CrowX chapter 3 . 1/19/2012
I don't have the books right here to compare, but did you just copy the whole chapter from the original books? I didn't notice any altercations.
Maybe it would have been better to just skip over it than copy something.
Sorry to say that, but I don't think that's allright at all!
| WyrdSmith chapter 3 . 1/19/2012
I don't understand. Please know I'm not criticizing; I'm just very confused. Are you just reprinting the original book, with minor little changes?
| loretta537 chapter 3 . 1/19/2012
this is a good story, i cant wait to see how things change from the books. will harry be getting away from the dursleys? will he go to gringotts during christmas and check on things?
| panda-ryuu-chan chapter 3 . 1/19/2012
A bit boring so far since the chapters so far were almost an identical copy to the book but I suppose it won't stay that way right? I hope so..
| loretta537 chapter 1 . 1/12/2011
this souns like it will be a good story