|Reviews for Marauder Madness|
| Mareeweasley7 chapter 5 . 4/12/2012
Awww i didnt want this to end! :( u should continue both Marauder Madness and Meddlinh in mayhem as they are great :)
| JoJo Lupin chapter 5 . 11/11/2011
i love it update soon!
| DPrentice chapter 5 . 4/26/2011
Woot! Finally an update Maree? wow P
I knew it'd be Sirius, coz well...I just knew! I don't need a reason to! Anyway, have I told you that I really enjoy your writing style? Because I do, a lot. Great chapter and I hope you won't make us wait so darn long for the next one missy! P
| Lexie chapter 5 . 4/25/2011
XD stupid Black.
BTW, DON'T call me Lex.
Veeeeery good work. Sirius is a jerk. Damn it that rhymed! :D
| Captain Moonshoes chapter 5 . 4/25/2011
I like how Maree doesn't think before acting (it's more realistic than thinking everything through), but somehow her underthinking ever-so-slightly comes across as overacting in some places.
But you're right, this chapter was well worth waiting for! You'd better not make me wait another two months before the next chapter...
| Yemi Hikari chapter 4 . 2/25/2011
Well, I really do like your story. A lot. I still think there are some gaps that could be expanded upon relationship wise. Maree's actions seem something like that of a third year, rather then a fifth year thoug, but something tells me that perhaps that was what she meant. As for McGonagal taking her badge, that is the first I've heard of a perfect losing their badge. Dumbledore would have hand picked her at the begining of the year, or the teachers as a whole... or her house head. I have to wonder, is it McGonagal's position to take the badge? Though I do honestly agree that her losing the position of perfect is a fitting punishment for the pranking she did. Looks like you've got yourself fatal flaws here and something she can grown from.
| Yemi Hikari chapter 3 . 2/25/2011
I am going to say, the jump from first year to fifth year is a little bit rough trasition wise. I personally wonder how the characters get to know each other so well and are on such easy speaking terms. But, it is much better then a good deal of the ones I see where the relationship jumps around and isn't explained. Maybe it was because I was kind of hoping for a little more of seeing them interact over the years. Think about adding something, even if it is a side one-shot, or a collection of cuts. I would think of something though, to show off why they think your OC would be a good match with Sirius. There is usually a reason when it isn't just "oh he's hawt".
| Yemi Hikari chapter 2 . 2/25/2011
So, I'll start off with the fact that I reread the last chapter and I caught Lily's name in there. The way the group talks, Lily... who has Muggle Parents sounds a little bit overly familiar with the people around her, which is why I was confused as to how old the other characters were. (I tend to skim when it comes to sorting hats in fanfiction I will admit.)
Anyways, I went back and reread the last chapter, or skimmed through it really quick this time because your OC brought up that her mom isn't going to be happy with her being in Ravenclaw. The question is, why? No detail is ever really gone into the why and I think when someone worries about something like that, there is usually a reason why.
This is still one of the better Maurauders era fanfics I've read, though I still have some pointers.
First off, on the issue of cussing, you need to keep in mind that these kids are eleven to twelve years old, not fourteen to fifteen years old. A lot of them won't know a good deal of the "more colorful" cuss words. In fact, the insults they are likely to throw about are going to be pitance to what they are going to throw around later on once they pick it up from the eldar students.
Second, to cut back on Mary Sue traits (not saying she is a Mary Sue... some traits can be shared by a non-Sue and a Mary Sue), and add in some traits you find with a character more aligned towards a non-Sue, start working in some places where she has to struggle. Keep in mind how old your character is.
I am impressed with the number of characters included. I've seen some HP OC fanfics that might as well be original work as they cut out a lot of the students and barely if ever mention the teachers. While your fanfic focuses on your OC characters, particularly your main, the canon characters still show through, which is majorly important.
| Yemi Hikari chapter 1 . 2/25/2011
May I say that on the first chapter I am actually very impressed with the writing you have so far? So far, neither one of them are Mary Sues. They have personalities, they are believable, they don't have any major powers given to them for no reason. Not to mention, I normally have to tell people to stay the hell away from first person point of view as it isn't easy to write, pardon the French. I don't have to do that with this fanfic as you so far have a great comand of the use of first POV. I liked her having problems with her trunk, even mentioning the fact. Most people forget that when they write their fanfics. They mention the character being small, but she ends up pulverizing others.
A couple of things I noticed. First, what year are the Mauraders in? You don't want to make them too much older then your OC. Also, Severus is actually in the same year as them and Lily is friends with him, not the guys believe it or not. As for walking through the woods, they wouldn't be doing that either. I think you meant to write, instead of forest, that they were walking down a path surounded by trees. That sounds much more like what you wanted in that one part.
Anyways. I'll try to remember to check out the other chapters after some time. Right now I've got some other things I need to mind my attention too. I will say though, the first chapter had the ability to draw me in and it was obviously not thrown together and I can tell you put a lot of work and effort into it.
| Lexie chapter 4 . 2/23/2011
Yayayayayay! Just... Yay...
| Captain Moonshoes chapter 4 . 2/22/2011
Proud of me? I actually read it... and I enjoyed it. Nothing more I can add.
Now write some more.
And also London's middle name is Rose. Just thought I'd throw that out there.
| DPrentice chapter 4 . 2/21/2011
ooooo...I wonder who's gonna save her
once again, great chappie my dear and I look forward to reading on )
| DPrentice chapter 3 . 1/19/2011
Oh? So are you going to pair yourself with then? P
| moonluver26 chapter 3 . 1/18/2011
ok good story and nice transition to 5ty year (right?).I'm a little confused as to who Lexi is, at firsti thought it was Alexi but then you interchanged it with Alexa which i didn't git. So if you could please clarify. other than that i reallyenjoy your story and crazycharacters.
| Lexie chapter 3 . 1/18/2011
Heyy that had me laughing! Was the choccy brown or dark? lolololololololol! Love the whole crush thingy! And Maree makes me laugh...
Oh goodness no, Vic as a prefect? *look of horror*