|Reviews for Under The Surface|
| Musette du Coudray chapter 8 . 3/13
loved it. it was more realistic than many fanfics i've read in the past where the everything is just so improbable that i'm slamming my laptop lid in my frustration. The Izaya and Shizuo have much deeper characters than the typical fanfic. All in all i quite enjoyed it.
| Twi-Hoster Girl chapter 8 . 3/6
You broke my heart into a million pieces :( But I did really enjoy your story! It was very suspensful and full of surprises! Each chapter had me desperately wondering what was going to happen next. I really didn't see Izaya's death coming at all! Although I was hoping for a happy ending, I can honestly say this ending suits it better. I was trying to think of ways this could've ended happily without being too cheesy, but I just couldn't :( And so, I must commend you for somehow breaking my heart and entertaining me with your story!
| romagen chapter 8 . 2/26
This story is just . . . Amazing. Truly amazing. It goes to show that life doesn't always have happy endings. You made me cry when I found out that there was no way to find Izaya. And the fact that they never found his body . . . IT JUST MAKES ME SOOOOOOO SAD!
| Koen chapter 1 . 2/19
OMG! This is amazing I love it so far
(I'm really gonna have to re watch Buried now :P)
| paulinapaw10 chapter 1 . 2/8
One word: amazing.
The length is perfect, not too long and not too short. I like how you didn't really drag the story on too much, yet with enough extra details added.
Somewhere deep in my heart knew Izaya would probably die, but when the scene actually came, my heart broke a little with it. You also handled Shizuo's downwards spiral perfectly, and how he handled everything after Izaya's death.
I still wish Shizuo somehow miraculously found Izaya just in time and starts annoying each other again and live happily ever after sigh
| Noirx chapter 8 . 1/22
I'm crying so hard... Izaya and Shizuo were finally truced, were finally acting as though they were friends. They would have been too if given a little more time...
;-; Why is it that some people change only during life-or-death situations?
Brilliant story. Thank you for writing this.
| Blue Denim 7 chapter 8 . 1/22
I want to cry and scream and hate you for killing Izaya because up until the end I truly believed he was going to be saved. I'm so horribly upset and because of that I tip my hat off to you, it wad am amazing story. Izaya's death threw me off so badly and you managed to leave me so bitter, furious, and heartbroken.
A good story is one that can stir up emotions in a reader and you have succeded. Amazing job.
I'm sure people would have loved the character to live, but by doing the exact opposite I respect you even more for that. Once again, great job.
| MyHeartbreaker chapter 8 . 1/20
Today I had one of my most annoying mid-term exams and I feel mentally drained, so I came here to read some light stuff with an interesting concept. Your story introduction promised some really original set-up and I saw that it was Shizaya, so I started to read it without concern. After reading all the chapters in one go, all I have to say to you is,
how dare You!
I'm pissed for more than one reasons, first of all - this story is fucking great! :D How dare you write an amazing story with an ending like this? How dare you do the taboo no one really risks to do nowadays? How dare you make me love this work anyway?
Just. How dare you?!
But seriously, this is a fantastic piece of work. Your style is pretty simple but not without detail which made it comfortable to read it, at least for my poor tired brain. I remember you said that you've got the idea from a movie, I hadn't seen the movie and I'm not planning to watch it, but I'm a bit curious - could you spoil me a little bit? Did the buried character also die at the end of it? Or was it your own idea to go all the way with the possibility?
Either way, this was amazing, to see a story which didn't end the way the readers expected it to end. I was thinking about it a bit and in my opinion, the movie must have had a different kind of, a more intensive kind of suspense to it. I say this for one reason, the main character in the movie is someone we don't know beforehand, while here in this fic, we are already emotionally attached to Izaya... and surprisingly, this is the main reason why the movie must have been more suspenseful for the watcher. Because as a reader, I didn't feel the suspense because I thought that Izaya would die, but because I wanted to know the way he'd be saved at the end. I had the luxury of not thinking about death as a real option at all. Everyone expected him to be saved at the end, either by Shizuo or by some miracle, but we all did. So, I think this "plot-twist" was so unexpected because you had the courage to kill a well-loved character as a fan (I suppose you like the characters if you write an amazing story about them). This just blows my mind and makes me want to kill my favorite character in a story as well. Hahahaaa... okay, maybe not. But it made me realize how short we are on stories like this.
I had only one problem with the whole story, and it's not really a problem from your point of view, it's more like, I'd have handled it in a different way in your place, but no way I'm criticizing you on this. I just thought I'd share that I was slightly disturbed by the idea of Shizuo killing Nakamura. Not because of the act itself, I had no problem with Shizuo killing the bodyguard, but killing Nakamura was a more delicate thing to do with serious consequences. Killing Nakamura essentially meant killing Izaya in a way and I felt thrown off by this. I think, if I wanted to have the same outcome as you (read: a dead Izaya with an unknown place of death), I would have killed Nakamura too, but not using Shizuo to do it. I'm thinking about suicide, tbh, it wouldn't really take anything from the story's value and would make sense too. Nakamura wanted Izaya dead, period. He said he wouldn't tell Shizuo where he was buried even if it meant his death. So I think it'd be understandable if he'd commit suicide just for making a point. At this point, his life was totally screwed anyway, his wife was dead too and he played a game. It would have been even more suspenseful if he'd kill himself just to assure Izaya and Shizuo that he won the game and that Izaya would die for sure.
Another aspect of Shizuo killing Nakamura I didn't like was that this meant putting a huge part of Izaya's death on his shoulders. Because killing Nakamura was the turning point and it was Shizuo's fault. He would have to feel so guilty about that one action, that it would destroy him in a way. You didn't really address this aspect of it, so I felt like it was just conveniently forgotten. It somehow caught my attention because everything else was masterfully planned out and execute too.
Anyway, as I said before it's not a huge problem, maybe I'm just an over-thinking reader (but I really like analyzing situations and whatnot), plus it's more like an author-choice instead of a serious flaw.
Finally, I don't know if you still read these comments you receive what more reply to them, but I'd like to get an answer to my question: did the character in the movie die as well or are you yourself this wicked? :D I don't want to watch the movie, so maybe I'll never know, but I hope that at least you read this review even if you don't answer it.
I had a surprisingly great time reading it, I'm glad you didn't put a 'character death' warning on it because I'd have never clicked on it with that label, plus, with this story...it would have ruined the whole fun. :) Have a nice day!
| Puroppu chapter 8 . 1/20
Oh, really nice ending. I really though Izaya was going to survive somehow... but you really killed him. That was unexpected but nice. I loved the final conversation between Shizuo and Izaya. I liked this a lot.
| YourLuckyWish chapter 8 . 1/17
DO YOU KNOW HOW MUCH I CRIED!
DO YOU KNOW HOW MUCH I WANNA CRY FROM REMEMBERING IT ALL!? WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHH!
| SHADOWoftheFOX chapter 8 . 1/17
Although I really wanted a happy ending, I think this ending was perfect for the story.
| mitarafortunadow chapter 8 . 1/14
SERIOUSLY? YOU REALLY, REALLY, REALLY KILLED IZAYA?
I never thought that you would do that. I mean, it's Shizuo and Izaya, and IS THERE ANY REASON FOR ONE OF THEM TO REALLY, REALLY, DIE? Even though he had so many enemies and all I never thought that. Izaya. Would. Die.
You have done a really great job because you killed Izaya (even though I can't forgive you for that! EVER.)
Until the end I still thought Izaya would come out from nowhere, ALIVE, and live happily ever after with Shizuo. Until. The. End. I still thought that.
You... you... you...
YOU REALLY KILLED IZAYA! #runtocryingsomewhere
| The Shadow Demoness chapter 1 . 12/22/2013
XD Great story
everyone thinks Shizu-chan will find Izaya in time
I didn't expect that
now keep writing awesome stories :3
| The Swimming Swan chapter 7 . 12/7/2013
Oh my god. You did it. You killed Izaya. I cannot believe you just did that. (T.T) and Shizuo was on the phone with him until the very end and... *sobs hysterically*
I really though Izaya was going to survive. I am really scared of being buried alive now. Regardless, you really know how to surprise our readers and get an emotional reaction from them. Congratulations, I am extremely depressed now and I still cannot bring myself to not love this story.
| Izaya-sees-u chapter 8 . 11/27/2013
This story gave me more feels than I'd expected
Hell, I didn't even know that a story could hold so many feels ;u;