|Reviews for Wounded|
| TheWhaleCup chapter 6 . 8/21/2013
Make more, make more!
| A Shadow's Lament chapter 6 . 8/14/2012
I have only just begun reading your story today, and I must say that is it brillianty writen. You capture the complete derelict atmosphere and impending loss of hope and spirit with every chapter that you write. I can feel the soldiers agony, anger and sheer frustration at their loss and ineptitude. It is very captivating and I hope you update soon.
| v. nikiforovs chapter 6 . 4/11/2012
You have a point Zelda...
Hmm I wonder whats gonna happen next?
| Foxpilot chapter 6 . 4/11/2012
And now not one, not two, but three new, different perspectives show. The truth of war is that one side is never completely right.
War is predictable now. With enough foreknowledge and understanding, one can see the effects without needing to react to sudden turns. The problem with this is that for complete coverage, you need as many sides of the situation as possible. It's easy to say, "Some will die, some will be wounded, some will be otherwise ruined." It's another thing to postulate, "If we join this side, we can earn lots of money by selling war products to them while enjoying protection." It's something else entirely to ask, "Why are we at war in the first place? Why don't we just have our leaders fight a boxing match or something? This is -their- war." And it's another something still to think, "That side wanted the war, and this side wanted the war. It was inevitable." War is predictable. The effects are predictable. What's not predictable is human action. One can only predict by generalizations. Specifics create factors, and factors create variables. One can say that twenty thousand soldiers will die, but you can't say who. If all of those soldiers are from a set of regiments holding a line, your flank is screwed. War is predictable. We are not expendable.
This is the kind of writing that one would expect from a professional. However, it needs some details-not gore, but careful placement of room decorations and clothing patterns. A subtle detail can mean something else. A poster of Megan Fox in a soldier's room is easily three hopes or dreams. You're on a strong path. It's time to go to the next level.
An ironic note: Tabuu is one of the "faceless nobles/politicians" people suffering from war talk about. In this case, he is essentially faceless.
| hurricaneclaw chapter 2 . 4/7/2012
hmm... do you think they have a spell to bring Sirius's sight back? Probably not... :(
| Mystical chapter 6 . 4/6/2012
...Is Link dead?
Zelda has a point on the war. They're only creating more of it, no matter what they're doing right now...
| florentines chapter 6 . 4/6/2012
Apologies for the really, really... I dunno, descriptive, and overpoetic review below. I couldn't help it. The story was too brilliant.
Marth's dead, Red's dead, Mario's dead, and you just wrote it so beautifully I felt like crying. You should write a novel, you really made me feel how those soldiers in Iraq and Afganistan and wherever there's a war are feeling.
| MessengerOfDreams chapter 6 . 4/5/2012
...anyone else ya wanna kill? Jesus, it never does end does it? Just when you think you catch a break for a moment, someone else- a human with passion, heart and soul- becomes nothing more than a fucking casualty, another number in the papers and another name on the news. And you're left there, wondering when it's going to be you, and why it hasn't been you yet.
And it never seems to ever end, does it?
Phenomenal story. Absolutely so.
| v. nikiforovs chapter 5 . 4/5/2012
M-Marth can't be dead right?
He can't be! D;
| Guest chapter 5 . 12/26/2011
*Whimpers* Marth didn't die... he couldn't of died...
| Mystical chapter 5 . 11/25/2011
No. NO! Marth, why? This is what war creates...death, destruction, whatever an anarchy is! I don't get it...with so much violence, how can a war end peacefully! (takes a deep breath) I guess I'm getting a little emotional, but now I'm really sad. I'm internally crying...and I bet this is super realistic to the wars out there.
| Mystical chapter 4 . 11/25/2011
I swear I'm going to cry now. I'm not kidding at all...
| Mystical chapter 3 . 11/25/2011
Okay, what I said about Gannondorf in the first review, I immediately regret it. I guess he's not so bad...and I appreciate how Gannondorf is taking this situation...it's not like he had much of a choice. Continuing reading...
| Mystical chapter 2 . 11/25/2011
Mario totally should have been General of the Army...nice character situation for him, too. Okay, now to read more...
| Mystical chapter 1 . 11/25/2011
Whoa. I wasn't expecting this...it's quite realistic...
First off, I admire that you're dedicating this to all the soldiers that are dead and in war right now. I'm proud of someone who respects and honours them. Second, I really like how you used each character so far in this fic. I should have started reading this earlier...the situations for the each of them are unique and, well, fascinating, if that's the word I'm looking for. Third(actual more opinion stuff) No one's going home for Christmas? Uh oh...okay, I guess I better read more before I start mentally cursing Gannondorf and Tabuu...