Google translate, please.
Amigo… no voy a mentirte, me resulta difícil leer tu historia no por la estructura y tampoco por la trama, más bien son las palabras que eliges para Severus respecto a los otros personajes. Nunca, jamás en su sano juicio Severus tutearía a los merodeadores con tanta simplicidad he informalidad, pues te recuerdo que su pasado fue algo muy marcado en el tipo. Por otro lado, admito que la facilidad con la que le salen las cosas en su interacción con el resto de la gente es en parte comprensible, explico y me explico: el mundo había arruinado la relación entre Severus y Lily la primera vez por sus matices, fue porque el tipo simplemente era un Slytherin y eso se aplicó a todo.

En comparación, este Severus comparado al otro es privilegiado en cuanto al trato que recibe de otros, solo piénsalo. Se que la historia está muy avanzada y probablemente se encuentre completa, pero tienes que admitir que la realidad de este Severus (Transmigrado o no) se encuentra fuera de proporciones y me resulta un tanto hipócrita sus reflexiones con los Slytherin teniendo en cuenta que era uno.

Si me preguntas, parecería que la historia está siendo relatada desde el punto de vista de Lily, ignorante, carente de profundidad real de todo, ingenuo y simplista.

Si los maestros o los estudiantes hubiesen interactuado de la misma manera incluso en su primer año, te aseguro que las cosas hubieran resultado un tanto diferentes, pero de nuevo, el trato es diferente y complaciente primero porque el color de su túnica es rojo y se mantiene indiferentemente, lo cual es razonable, al manos lo de actuar más con una vida de experiencia que un primer año de verdad, eso si lo entiendo, pero lo que quiero resaltar es lo anterior.

Además, no me sorprendería si se convierte en el chico dorado de Dumbledore, eso definitivamente sería la funda del paste en toda mi perorata.

This was excellent and by far my favorite Severus and Lily get together in the end story. Very well thought out with great pacing and character development.

I'm sorry but there is no world in which james could be expelled for anonymously reporting remus, considering the fact that james would be an accomplice if he didnt, with the werewolf registration act in place even if it later gets overturned. Dumbledore cant force him to break the law just because he believes its wrong.

What the heck is a half and quarter werewolf, you either turn into one or you dont. You either have the curse or don't it's not like being a half giant. Do they only turn once every 2 or 4 moons, only turn 1/2 or 1/4 of the way into a werewolf every full moon. Do thry just have enhanced senses near the full moon and are slightly allergic to silver.

You said there's no canonical name for James' father, but that isn't true. Although it's not in the books, it's been confirmed that James' parents were Fleamont and Euphemia, though most people mistakenly think they are Charlus Potter and Dorea Potter née Black.

I love this version of teenage Sirius. I could so fall for him LOL

Great story so far. For all the time travel stories I've seen there's not many where Severus goes back to being eleven or where he gets resorted into Gryffindor. It's amazing seeing all the changes and new friendships that have come about from this even though Mark's death was very sad.

Loved Sev's gift to Liy with the necklace and Lily's Christmas gift to him even more, so thoughtful and clever and perfect. Love how much Severus cares about his friends and supports them, particularly Remus and how much happier Severus is. Love the suggestion of killing Voldemort with a bullet.

Just on Nymphadora Tonks, she graduates before Harry starts. I say this because having played Hogwarts Mystery the character you play is in the same year as her and it's a widely discussed fact that we graduate before Harrys starts and looking on the wiki it says she was born before September 1973 which means she woudl have attended 1984 - summer 1991 not September 1991 and finally because she's in the same year as Charlie Weasley who wasn't there when Harry started.

Anyway, that aside enjoying the story, looking forward to reading to the end

Loved this book SO much, i think it should be published! James and Umbridge deserved more than what they got! I like how the good characters who died or worse in JK Rowlings books/movie got their happy endings, again so good, thank you.

I love this story, I really enjoyed reading it.

AGGHI HATE POTHEAD SO F-ING MUCH IF JKR BROUGHT HIM BACK AND DROWNED HIM I WOULD BE HAPPY THE BLOODY SON OF A BITCH

I've read this before, and i really always think that it's a crossover before u mention it in the end of the chapter lol

FINALLY OH MY GOD

Well, that's that, then. Final verdict: good story with some issues.

I'll be honest with you: as much as I dislike James Potter, I think he was never the kind of person to do what you had him do there at the end and I think it dragged this story down. That's spite, the worst kind of dislike, because it's coming up with a reason for why someone you dislike is reprehensible instead of disliking them because they did something you find reprehensible. It's not an admirable kind of writing and going by the quality of the rest of the story, I frankly think you could have done better than that.

Is it weird that I think that Carmichael would have worked better if she had been male? To really drive home the fact that sexual assault is something that no one is truly safe from, that it spares no one, and that every victim deserves to be treated as equal no matter their circumstances or personal disposition.

Solidly written depiction of trauma. I can see why some people wouldn't like to read it, but you kept it well within the bounds of good taste. My respect to you.