love getting updates from you :)

So you need to come here and pimp your story.

Stop using the fandom!

Congrats on the published version!

I always welcome outtakes from stories that I love. And while you can no longer release them in real time, the they are loved just the same! :)

Love to see how distracted he was from the get go. Maybe her "plan" wasn't so overwhelming in its conception.

Best of luck with book sales!

xo
Nan

OMG! So excited to see this outtake...and can't wait to get on Amazon and get the published version! Thanks for the update!

hmm, you made their voices too similar. i doubt that everyone thinks in the same choppy way bella/emma does. lol

LOL! Poor Edward. It's over for him. :)

I read the published version. And am sorry to say that I didn't like it at all. The chopped writing style worked very well for the fic. But as book, it just felt very cold, disjoint. Emma's "voice" wasn't witty and funny like in the fic; she was annoying more than anything, the humor felt forced and immature. A lot of authors who p2p don't work on their characters, they just change the names from B&E and don't flesh them out in any way - which is a BIG mistake. If you write fic with B&E it's not really important, because we already "know", and automatically love, them; that doesn't work with original characters. You need to flesh them out, make them unique, give them a distinctive voice, make them relatable, whatever. The simply name-change thing worked for FSOG, because the story was "unique". And Fifty had memorable quirks like the no touching rule. Her Bella was very bland, but still, nice and VERY relatable, so another plus. Your Emma was annoying (and I LOVED your Bella in the fic, she was my hero!) and Alaric? well, honestly, he's utterly forgettable. I just couldn't connect with Emma & Alaric, because you gave me no reason to. I lost interest in them, and their HEA, rather quickly, and had Amazon reimburse me. Which I hate doing by p2p authors, because I love to support people from the fandom. But, honestly, the story bored me. :(

If you publish something else, I will of course buy it. I know you have talent. But, I do hope that your next book is not written in the same style.

So glad to see this outtake and that you won't forget us. Thanks so much for your fics and congratulations on publishing your work. I hope to continue seeing you here.

Thanks for sharing your writing with us over the years. I've bought your book and will continue to support you and other fandom authors. I'll review when I've read it. Best of luck!

Jess Molly Brown

Love it! Bought The Plan on the second day. Congrats to you. Outtakes are fun!

Wow self promotion at its best

I loved your story when it was available before. Loved this little sneak peak into Edward's thoughts of Bella. Can't wait for more.

Loved the outtake! I knew the published version was out but didn't realize it was expanded. Am definitely going to have to check that out!

Thank you, thank you, thank you! After reading that scene in the book, I so wanted in his head. That was actually super satisfying. Congratulations on the success of the book! Wishing you so many more good things. xoxo

Have ordered, received and devoured said expanded version. Not quite the same without the original characters, but still a lovely read. Well done, Qwen!