Reviews for The Lion's Pride |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Wow. Just... wow. Your take on this outlines the original. We'll done. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm sorry, I've recently started reading this series and I've gotten so many much needed laughs and good feels from it. Thank you for writing this and sharing it with the world. |
![]() ![]() you already had snape teach them all sectumsempra daphne describes it as disgusting tho i think the other spell she mentioned is the more disgusting one the one that pees flesh like a banana |
![]() ![]() you did make a minor error in a previous harry states he cant imagine killing someone to moody you had him blow a death eater's head off via reducto between the eyes in the dom, he had at the point of the conversation with Moody already killed. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey, loving your story! Just wanted to let you know that you have a slight continuity error: You say here that Snape just now teaches Harry sectumsempra, but earlier you said he taught it (or at least demonstrated it) to all the teens on the island. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I’m sure this has been mentioned before, but the whiplash between Megan and Mandy being used as the name of the imperioused girl was distracting. Otherwise, a good chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I did not need this image you bastard |
![]() ![]() I love this book but why did you have them get back together so soon it felt like harry breaking up with daphin wasn't as important as it should have been. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Noticed some issues with the names in this chapter and the last. Mandy Brocklehurst is dead, and Lisa Turpin and Megan Jones are the two ravenclaw girls involved in the necklace incident that killed Millicent, with Megan being imperiused, no? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Make it bloody when they destroy the Death Eaters. Not fair to you since they have been dropping |
![]() ![]() ![]() But now Nott knows. Damn |
![]() ![]() ![]() Idiots who dont ward their trunks I can’t imagine Moody didnt teach them |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hopefully, Hermione gets a clue. I was finished after Book 6, where her IQ dropped a hundred points. Poor Millie. But she had a great final year. Bastards |
![]() ![]() ![]() There is a great line in Orange is Not the Only Color by Jeanette Winterson: “Get off the Cross, honey, we could use the wood.” |
![]() ![]() ![]() Cry havoc and let slip the Weasely Twins |