I’ll admit, Shirou is pretty OOC in this story. Not as much as characters are in bad fanfics (or just bad, inconsistent official stories), but noticeable. Also, there are some cringier moments littered throughout. That said, it’s not like you critisize Shakespeare for adding out of place dick jokes either. So having, uh, more low brow parts that reflect the time of writing and stand out against the overall tone and quality and the like of the rest of the work is hardly exclusive to this fanfic, let alone just your fanfics, let alone any fanfic in general.

All in all though, these are nitpicks, and things that ars mostly expected in a fanfic this ancient. I do like how the overall quality in the tedious parts are becoming more professional. And the story itself of course is enjoyable.

This was... good. I liked the interactions between Shirou and Homura. And rereading this has given me an appreciation for how double layered their conversation was.

So I like the story but there are many minor false narrtives in this. Shirou projections last forever first of all, the wizard marchshall is over 2k years old as the Heaven Feels was lost around the BC to AC and it is third magic. Miya would only be equivalent to Saber if she was under Shirou control with the incomplete summoning. For Fragrich to work the person must see the person they are using against strongest attack so it would not work against Miya or Shirou. Shirou can use runes efficently if he studies them because unlike magecragt runes does not require element and origin. Archer wasn't particularly good at them because he did not focus on them he instead went around saving everyone never really bothering to study deeply besides the bare minimum. She can learn regular boundedfields his reality Marble is a giant walking one. He can learn many magecraft but it takes him twice as long compared ot others. He can also be good and mineralogy and alteration if he studies them. The secret of magecraft is stupid for Shirou to adhere to it when it comes to Sekirei as they are aliens whther they know or not would not cause the Magi assossication to come down on them but their existence would.

Ah yes, the big one. One of the most impactful fanfictions in all of the Fate fandom.
Again this is a not-so-serious series put together with the far more comparatively serious Fate series. The inmate silliness of the Sekirei plot is sure to clash with the cold scientific logical lore of the Nasuverse, but that’s a source issue for the narrative and not much against you.
In terms of the writing and nitty gritty stuff, you can definitely see the general improvement. And despite the handicap of mashing two conflicting series together you handle things pretty well. I’ll comment more on that sort of thing as it comes up.
For this chapter though, the inciting plot is very contrived and convoluted. But that’s par for the course. So it’s not that big of a deal. All in all, a strong start for such an important fanfiction.

There are a lot of what I'd call "minor problems", lore or balancing issues or very occasional typos, but the story is great beside that. It's also actually finished. There were definitely story beats that could be handled better, but as my attention was held despite that I know this is a good story.
I think I can confidently say this is an 8/10.

I will probably never reread it, but I am very satisfied I saw this at least once all the way through. It's not in my list of favorites, but it's definitely good enough to recommend. Overall, kind of a weird balance of qualities, but I think the story is objectively well made and that I'd probably still have enjoyed it even if I hated both series involved. So, and I don't say this often, very well done.

Also, to be fair, I think I can count the number of stories on three hands that I've ever given more than an 8/10.

Dope.
Would read again if I was the type to do so.
Nice work Author-san, I appreciate you.

How has a story this amazing home so long without a react fic, I wonder? Hey gabriel, if you're there, can you post a react fic challenge, pretty please?

I had to binge this quickly so I could get focused on school work but this was amazing. The first review I’ve written and this story deserves all the praise it gets.

What a damn way to end a chapter XD you've been working that line for months and I can tell XD

the plot is superb, as ecchi and harem it can get, the juggle between serious and comedy is very great, not to mention how you portray Shirou as close to UBW counterpart but also make the character flexible and very alive.

f*ck sakes Shirou XD considering worse bad day including getting into close combat with figure from history that can bisect you in half and a very vengeful ex girlfriend and her familiar that you have threesome with, yah. Safe to say, getting sweaty inside a karaoke bar with another playboy is one of tamer days for ya.

Oh Kami I'm finally getting why that's a very absurd sentence in and its own.

This felt the perfect opportunity to explore that enhancement that comes from being a ashikabi of this many Sekireis, but okay.

Has Shirou become a alcoholic or something?

Kusano will be the most kinky and unstoppable member of the harem, mark my words

Wow, Shirou has been slow in this.

He really couldn't have said, they were pretty much fighting-ghost-slaves?