Reviews for In Flight |
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![]() ![]() ![]() okay cool and all but why does he not consider himself in love with rib and saber sure they are apart but that doesn't mean he doesn't love them I'm not sure if this is what you have intended but it seems like that to me |
![]() ![]() ![]() Man, what a trip this was. And a trip well worth 2ish weeks reading. I stumbled upon this, and honestly with that description, I thought it was gonna be Archer Shirou before he became a Heroic Spirit. Glad I read past the first and onto the second, then the third, then the fourth, before realizing Im at the 7th before forcing myself to stop and take a break. In short, I loved it. And I particularly loved noticing small tidbits of characterization in between lines that become almost like a gag. Off the top of my head, "Legacy of a mispent youth". That was fun to notice later on. Of course besides that, improvements are always possible, not like I noticed any. Except for the ending. Usually, I groan about summary endings like these, but what can I do?Not like it wasnt good, but compared to the rest, its more Im just "hearing" it than actually "seeing" it. And a few things I noticed absent from it: What happened to Seo and his flock, same for Uzume and Chiho? What of the other Ashikabi and Sekireis? Especially Hayato? And most importantly, where was his big talk with Takami and Yukari, and him explaining Thaumaturgy to both Takami and Karasuba? Not to mention his reunion with Saber and Rin? The last three more like requests than anything. Welp, judging by the last updated, doesnt seem like Ill get these answered nor will I read those scenes. If you're reading this one review, if it makes you feel any better tho, Ill def think about this one for a while, maybe a week at most but that's up there for indication of being a good story in this site. |
![]() ![]() A yaoi warning would be appreciated... not my cup of tea so dropped |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hah, Gay! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I don't normally leave reviews but this story is one of the best and really loved the ending. I really hope that you do a one-shot fic of this explaining what happened to the others. But even if you don't, I don't mind. This is one of the greatest fan-fics. I really hope that the day would come when I get to see this animated by Ufotable or bones. But that is just wishful thinking. The fan-fic's plot is equivalent or surpassed the plot of UBW. All I want to say is great work. |
![]() ![]() May I just... May I just say... This was amazing, in all ways. I'm not going to nitpick or give you constructive criticism. I just felt compelled to tell you that this is one of the best well written plot oriented stories I've ever seen on this site. Their is so much more I want to say and elaborate on but I'm honestly not trying to write a lot at this time. The basis for this story and then ow you elaborated it into a plot... I'm gonna stop there or else i'll be typing for 1 hour at least. Thank you for the upload. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Soo i was reading and everytime Scrapped Number mentioned and your iteration if this, author, i cant help myself from cringing bcs it means not winging herself it meant that her adjuster just screwed up and tried to harm her bcs he was fired (and btw Yume wasnt scrapped number). |
![]() ![]() ![]() I've come back to the beginning of this story for my review... If feels like I've lost someone when I realized this story is over. I had somehow became so invested in the characters of this world... I'm fucking crying right now man, crying! I've obviously favorited the story as it has hit me harder than literalhundreds of professionally written novels. The greatest pain though comes from seeing you might not be on the platform anymore, that it's almost certain you'll never write again. You've probably moved into happier things with your life by now and dont waste your time on old fanfiction reviews like these... But I really want to say, Thank You So Much! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you so much for the story, I loved it! |
![]() ![]() always come back to read this and Hill of Swords. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I know its been a long ass time since you finished this but I just wanted to review incase you ever come back and read this. I love 95% of this fanfic. The only parts I didn't like were the Rin and Saber arc. I actually almost dropped it then. I'm glad I didn't since I quite liked the ending but there you go. Still, the fic is a hell of an accomplishment. To be so long and so consistently good is amazing. Definitely makes me wish you would come back and write some more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() also I love how you portray the characters, I've only seen a couple clips of sekirei and a short clip or two of fate but I've read a descent amount of fanfic and the characters seem to both match the anime and have there own twist to them, after reading so many fabrics I can really appreciate you being able to do all the character accurately, most fanfics always have a personal biased or they base the character's reactions off there own basic thoughts |
![]() ![]() ![]() absolutely loved the fanfiction, kinda wish there was a part two/sequel but I get the feeling a continuation of this majestic fanfic wouldn't work |
![]() ![]() ![]() love the fanfiction but shirou's explanations of magecraft lately are really annoying, he keeps not fully explaining things or he just stops explaining things, he's even not explained the things he was supposed to explain in favor of side notes a couple times... I don't know if this is on propose or something but I don't get why you did the explanations the wag you did |
![]() ![]() Into Russian? |