Reviews for In Flight
kail chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
this is nice

longer chapter PLEASEEEE...
Akitesyu chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
nice chapter. Spotted something though.

The book tumbled from her hand as Yukari gaped at the BLUE haired woman standing nearby. "Huh?" was all she could get out. It was about what I was thinking as well as I stared at Akitsu who continued to watch me

Akitsu had BROWN hair
Yvori Gevura chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
aaa great chapter but when shirou will find that his fire sekirei its really a women and no a gay dude, becoiuse after al he said especialli the part where the Ashikabi must be from a diferent gender he did not realize the fact that then he is a she but i hope you could answer that in the next chapter see ya later you rock!
Vandenbz chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
For a moment I thought she was an OC but with her name respelled it makes more sense. Quite the way for Shirou to wake up in the morning, funny at first turning hilarious at Akitsu's point of the clothes being too tight! Yukari is definitely hyper, her way of finding out how to be a proper sister may be misguided but the laughs are worth it. Nice of Shirou to accept Akitsu as his Sekirei, on top of that the scene with Homura was excellent too. Poor Shirou, having to explain how the room got in that state had to be painful! I wonder how he'll take it if Homura starts to change gender. Nice method of explaining how Akitsu got her outfit, Yukari strikes again in causing chaos! You even managed to put that underwear joke in there at the end too. Please update soon!
guy chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
Shirou the gay sadomasochist drug runner! HAHAHAHAHA! Now that is funny. Keep it up.
Morality0duality chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
When i read this this i what i did. Hahahahahahaahahaaha! ehehehehehehehe!

Sputterrrrrrrrrr

cough
Rubel chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
Yukari is awesome and I love the characterization of Kagari. Is he still going to genderswap? Thanks for the great read
dragon-cloud16 chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
Another great chapter. Although, the Homura scene felt a little off since he was more willing to go down while trying to kill the guy that started the game. And we have our first look at Musubi, the Kuma-ken fighter. I can't wait to get a hint of the Izumo Inn. Especially if Shirou tries to setup a workshop with Miya around.

I love what you did with Yukari. A girl that throws herself into everything and finally meeting her brother is just going to be a great source of comedy. I can't wait to see a scene with Shirou fighting a Sekirei though. How will a magi handle one of the aliens? Especially one that specializes in weapon tracing.

Wait a second, since Unlimited Blade Works copies the weapons and skills of their users, can't Shirou trace some of the Sekireis' weapons and use them as his own along with a copying of their powers?
Anonymous Reviewer chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
Good building-up, though I would like to ask if you were gonna preserve canon "Minato"'s flight of Pokem- Sekirei, seeing as that obvious Musubi cameo seems to indicate otherwise. (could be wrong though, you might just make them meet later)

and good job linking Kagari's initial motivation with Shirou's - it's something I hadn't thought of myself. Cheers
B.B. Rain chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
...And this [i]still[/i] isn't the most awkward day he's had?

Even after his sisters' eager support of his eccentric new lifestyle?
Hotako Tomoe chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
... BRILLIANT! I about fell out of my chair laughing twice, VERY well done, So wow, Shirou starts out with Akizu and Homura. Though it seems that Minaka is slipping in welcoming his own son to the S-Plan, He needs to take over the TV soon or something. I wonder how things were different since Shirou wasn't there to wing Musubi, with a mostly under control Homura, I'd imagine he'd send the twins packing full bore. Though I think a lot of fans like me are wondering, when will we hear the magical words: 'Trace On' or 'I am the bone of my sword..'? He has to confide in someone sometime, and somehow he needs to end up at Izumo Inn. I'm anticipating your next chapter, update quickly! I want MOAR!
Lord Edric chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
Poor poor shiro, I wonder how Yukari will react to Kagari
5553345764 chapter 1 . 12/17/2010
An original crossover concept. You did a good job of integrating the two worlds and magic systems.

I found Takami/Shidou and Karasuba/Shidou interaction very well written and realistic. Also liked the story behind Shirou's adoption. It was much better thought out than such fics tend to be.

PS. Found a small error: you wrote Karabasa instead of Karasuba once.
En chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
Your back(sniff)...I'm so happy, I'm crying(tears flowing) your back...your back! ...a bit over dramatic but anyways I'm glad your back and love the new story
HikariNiwa chapter 3 . 12/17/2010
Nishishishi. It's steadily growing more and more interesting. I found the scene with Kagari quite... hmm, not sure how to word this. It was good though.
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