Definitely an interesting concept. I don't think that, out of all of the fanfiction I have read, this premise has ever been used. I look forward to seeing how you will develop this story.

I do have one (most likely baseless, considering your other stories) concern, however. Considering you are playing with a canon Naruto, I worry that Naruto will end up as quite a weak character throughout the story. Not weak in characterization, of course, but weak in skill.

In canon, Naruto is a joke. He never really becomes stronger, just luckier and better at overwhelming his opponents with crazy one-shot moves. I dearly hope that he is not this way in your story (and am sure he won't).

Anyway, can't wait to see this develop. Good luck!

Great work in this chapter. I like how it was done and this story has some intresting ideas going on.

Even though I like Haku I am hoping you will kill her becouse of this change though. What I mean is in cannon the brige scene is the first time we get a tast of the demons power and he know about it at lest for a while before that. If it happens the same in this story he will most likly not hold back the power as much as he will not know it is from the demon and thier for kill Haku while using it.

Neat Idea, thats for sure. I just don't know what kind of direction you have in mind with this one. Oh well, we'll see, won't we?

Keep it up, you rock!

Ryousanki

my god, another one O.o your just on fire man, this is a fantastic pilot BTW

good story

Oh my god, " 'I-see-you-motherfucker-jutsu' or 'get-out-here-and-get-your-ass-kicked-jutsu," Jesus this made laugh so hard. I think I read this line at least twenty times.

Well, I am concern about the path this story would take. Mainly because for what I understand in the manga and the anime. Naruto always draws upon the Kyuubi's power when he is under emotional distress. Plus eventually in his ninja career he will go thru such a state. Which could lead to him to draw upon the foul red chakra.

The only way I might see this happening is if Naruto gets ALL of Kyuubi's chakra seal. By either Jairaya which is most likely since he has the so call 'key' or Sarutobi.

But, well, I don't know how you plan to take this fic. Since for what it seems your might try to make Naruto into a tracker ninja. Which would be pretty cool if you ask me because that would be a new aspect of an AU which I had never read before.

Anyways at the end of the day. You did a great job on the new chapter and it does look interesting mainly because your the one writing this. You always seem to add something in your chapters that always stands out in the comedy sense.

For example in the latest chapter of TSK when Naruto told Hidan to shut the fuck up because winners were talking. Best line of the whole chapter. Anyhow im looking forward to the next update.

go kenchi this seems interesting story if you keep writing i will keep reading

Great first chapter, I'm looking forward to the next one.

Very promising start. It'll be interesting to see how Naruto eventually reacts. Also, I like the way this is moving towards an intelligent but still goofy Naruto. Between this and The Sealed Kunai, you are quickly becoming one of my favorite authors on this site. Keep up the good work.

firstly i would pay to read your stories, secondly i am glad i check your author page daily or i wouldn't find this until later. thirdly i liked the echolocation jutsu, i would call it the Hidden Radar technique because apparently only iruka and naruto know it so it isn't that well known, or the faux byakugan, or the dowsing jutsu since i doubt that many ninja know what the hell it means. A rookie mistake that i thik is made is letting your opponent know what you are doing while you are doing it, you shout Katon: gokakyu no jutsu, they know you are going to shoot a huge ass fire ball at them and get the hell out of dodge, but with a name like dowsing jutsu they don't know what is happening being confused as F**k and you find the and slit their throat with a kunai. another thing to think about, we know that everyone shouts the name of their jutsu before unleashing it, why don't they interchange the names to confuse their enemies?

on to questions: the first one is the pairing? afterall what is a story without a little romance? it is freaking harry potter where most everyone gets married to someone they have had the least interaction with. so what would it be naru-hina, naru-kure, naru-anko, or naru-saku or are you going to make another oc pairing, cause all of your ocs are awesome.

next is teams, naruto is obviously going to be a tracking/capture/nin/taijutsu specialist so my guess is either naruto stays on team canon, or i am thinking naru-shika-ino on asuma's squad (i am assuming he would have a wind affinity). naruto and shika make great battle plans and naruto can locate the target, while shika captures it, and ino interrogates.

well that is enough of me telling you what i want you to do because of how conceited i probably am, good luck with your story and update soon.

This is the first time I read explanation about how Naruto pull off drawing the entire mountain. Usually other author just write that Naruto's stealth is so awesome he deceive all ninja. Good job. And for the chapter, it's quality is good as usual though for the story I'll reserve judgement till I see where you're going with this.

Good beginning !

Please hurry up with next chapter.

Oh I like this story already, you have the ability to key the pulse technique into the kage bushin to help him with complete situational awareness. You could even go one step further and have a Hyuuga help him with the Jutsu in order for him to make it more effective!

great job, I am eagerly looking forward to the next chapter!

nice keep it up

Cool...

A simple change in story line...

Want to see where you take it... i like all except for 1 of your ficks... so chances are it will be good one...

Even then hoe are you going to pull of the wave arc without him knowing about kyuubi...

AnyWhay keep up the good work...

By the way good addition in arsenal for starter... sensing is one of the fields he improves at the end and even that in sage mode... putting it at the start... let see where it will go...