Reviews for Lunar Knights : An Endless Battle
LunarEclipseKid chapter 1 . 2/15/2013
Are you ever going to post a second chapter? I'm hopeing you aren't going to stop here, it's to good a start! So...
GET.
A SECOND.
CHAPTER!
misc-13 chapter 1 . 6/26/2011
Wow! you have an awesome talent at writing!
Stephy825 chapter 1 . 3/18/2011
Gah, well, this is interesting. Though I guess I kind of fainted somewhere in the middle from over-use of descriptions. Hahaha...sorry. I'm normally not the type to sleep in the middle of a story; but it seemed to drag so long that I couldn't keep up. You're writing's really good that's for sure. It's just that it didn't catch my attention that much; which led me to getting a little bored. Don't think of this as a flame, just my honest opinion. Maybe you should thin down the descriptions a little? I noticed you're over-using your commas here too.

Try focusing more on the impact rather than description. It's good to have some adjectives; yet too much is the same thing as too little. *smiles sheepishly* Not everybody has a long sense of patience. Unless, well, the story's that captivating.

I look forward to seeing what's gonna happen.