|Reviews for Perchance to Dream|
| Mylisssa chapter 3 . 1/14/2012
I like the story I like Jacob I like the way you write jessica. All I get from Bella is harsh bitter negative. I'll read more though but hoping I'll be able to like her more soon.
| Mylisssa chapter 2 . 1/13/2012
I still like the imagery this chapter yet I do see some of the telling more than showing, but more so telling even though you already showed. I back tracked my reading a few times because some times this chapter seemed like it was past tense and other times as if it was present tense. I really like Jacob and Bella's relationship.
| Mylisssa chapter 1 . 1/12/2012
You write amazing imagery in surprisingly few words. The writing style is refreshingly different than a lot of fanfic. Cant wait to have time to read more.
| Taneva Rose chapter 3 . 1/11/2012
Just thought I'd offer some criticism too that I think will help you in the long run:
However, if I could offer just one piece of advice. Sometimes you show more than you tell, which means basically that you give the reader information for example "the city was lonely" is something you could show via description.
| Taneva Rose chapter 2 . 1/11/2012
Hey, I totally know what it's like to feel like you want more reviews! (saw you over at ADF) Chin up! As for your fic it sounds really interesting! I love the plot-line idea-destructive romances are my favorite. And you have a nice bitter-voice Bella. Be proud of what you have written, you're off to a really good start! I just thought I'd give you my two cents! Best of luck to you. And remember big review counts are a symptom of the twitter/pimp machine, not the quality of the fic.:)
| nosleep3 chapter 2 . 1/11/2012
I know you want feedback. I know you are aware that not all feedback is going to be positive.
This story is not for me. I can't get into the grove of your main character's POV. She's very whiny. I'm not saying that's an unrealistic trait; hell, you're really GOOD at writing realistic whiny inner monologue. But it appears to be her defining characteristic, and that's a problem for me. I can't handle 17 more chapters if the protagonist is going to be constantly complaining about people she hates, the weather, the stairs, the ethical bankruptcy of academia, her commute, her crappy neighborhood, her apartment...there's too much of it, and it makes her unlikeable, in my opinion.
But I WILL check out your other stories and see if they're more my speed.
| bbp1 chapter 19 . 1/10/2012
Great chapter! Love the intensity, can't wait to see what happens...
| evilnat chapter 1 . 1/9/2012
Finally able to review!
I saw your teaser on The Fictionators and thought i'd give it a read.
Intrigued by the first chapter! Its really good and i cant wait to hit next and see where it goes.
| Cullenboyz chapter 16 . 1/7/2012
It was never love and it will never be love?
Your Bella is one tough chick. I do not get her, not at all. But I will keep reading, because you have not yet told us what the hell happened. :P
You are ebil. i will say it again.
| Cullenboyz chapter 15 . 1/7/2012
OH FOR CHRISSAKE WOMAN! THEY HAVEN'T EVEN FUCKED YET, AND YOU'RE BREAKING THEM UP.
You are seriously skipping the part where they are happily making like rabbits and going straight for the angst? Again?
You are like Stephanie M, only way more sadistic and with better lemons.
Okay, I know I'm having an unattractive tantrum.
The whole stalking thing is kinda killing me. By the time all of the social networks were up and huge, I was solidly married, so I never had to deal with it from a meeting new people to date point of view. But I cannot imagine NOT stalking someone I was interested in, when it is so easy to do now. I would think it would be kind of assumed...like, if you put that stuff out there on the internet, you have to assume ppl are going to read it. I know your Bella is not the most consistent or rational person and is very emotional - all the reasons I love her - so, is this just her, or would anyone be pissed off to find that someone was trolling their facebook stuff and looking for tagged photos? Old people want to know.
*eyes your story*
So really, when I hit next, I'm getting Bella a year later, leaving? *lip quivers*
| Cullenboyz chapter 14 . 1/7/2012
Ah, obsession, I remember it well. I don't believe I ever got to experience it in a MUTUAL way, alas. *eyeroll* There was that really hot guy in college. I googled him recently. Still hot, and making documentaries. Yeah, I can pick 'em. But I digress..
You write it as if you've been there, lol.
Anyway, I'm thoroughly sucked in again, and looking at the remaining chapters with trepidation. I know muses are a fickle bunch, but I sincerely hope yours are up and running, bc I need to keep reading!
| Cullenboyz chapter 13 . 1/7/2012
Well, hi! I caught up again. :)
That was some damn fine train lovin'. The intensity of this physical relationship is killing me. Not to mention the number of unanswered questions.
Thanks for making Jane the other woman instead of Tanya. I hate it when it's Tanya.
| bbp1 chapter 18 . 12/27/2011
Great chapter! Really like this story girl!
| October25 chapter 18 . 12/26/2011
I don't know if it's an accident but the chapter is twice if you look you'll see that you must've accidentally copied it under. anyways really good chapter, jessica is a b*tch and Edward is too darn polite at least I hope that's all it is :)
| Hadley Hemingway chapter 17 . 12/5/2011
After a review I read, I hustled right over and read this whole fic through - wow. Simply wow. The tumult of emotion and intensity here is amazing - my nerves are on edge and I'm just a reader! You're doing such a great job with this and I am waiting with anticipation (and anxiety) for the next update.