|Reviews for Mercy|
| HarryHermioneEdwardBella chapter 1 . 9/26/2012
| iluvmormonvampires chapter 1 . 5/12/2012
I liked this story a lot, and I could definitely see Victoria doing something like this.
| Latin chapter 1 . 1/16/2012
Wow for real Bella?
You watch you love get raped and your primary concern is being jealous...just wow.
| fcat5761 chapter 1 . 12/31/2011
What a good concept for the saga. Using sex as her revenge for James is so evil. Proves that Victoria really has vengeance on her mind as Bella would never be able to erase that from her mind.
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/1/2011
write more victoria needs to rid of bella then f u ck edward in skin tight leather LOVE IT ! XOXO
| brankel1 chapter 1 . 5/30/2011
| xSweetBubbleTeax chapter 1 . 2/21/2011
Huh you know I can actually picture Victoria doing something like this. Great job
| coffeebreaks chapter 1 . 12/29/2010
Rape is forced, unwanted sexual intercourse.
Technically, this is half-rape (even if there isn't such a thing) because he sort of enjoyed it. That was awkward.
I love the ending, though. The lemon would have fit in another story where Edward actually enjoyed Victoria's presence.
I kept picturing Bryce Dallas Howard as Victoria. It was unpleasant.
The story is well-written and descriptive, just not my type of thing. :)
| michelemybella chapter 1 . 12/28/2010
Sounds like a fun story so far ;)... So his cock is sparkly too? Luv it
| smmiskimen chapter 1 . 12/27/2010
I have to say that this story was very disturbing. I don't understand how you could just write a rape scene like that. Then, to post this without a warning of any nature is wrong. You should put it in the summary and at the beginning of the story that you detail a rape scene.
The only part I enjoyed was the very end where it sparkled. Other than that, this story is disturbing. It is well written grammar and spelling wise, but the plot leaves much to be desired. I know that graphic lemons are actually not allowed on fanfiction but we all write and read them. However, the majority stay away from the taboo topics of rape, incest, beastiality, necrophilia, etc... Do not be surprised if people report this story. I won't be reporting it, but I won't be recommending it or reading any of your other stories either. I find rape a topic never to detail EVER in a story. Mention it happening, or have a brief flashback of being held down, but to detail the entire thing is just wrong.
| Mrsleahcullen chapter 1 . 12/27/2010
Great job. Love the sparkle at the end.
| LivforLove chapter 1 . 12/27/2010
This is so strange. And disturbing like one of the worst things that could ever happen to you I would think. And it's just perfect in that it's totally Victoria's style. Rape and humiliation. While the idea is intriguing I would say that the tone seems to be a bit cavalier after something so traumatic. I'm not even sure if they can get over it.
What with Bella's established foundation of thinking that she's unworthy and inadequate...how is she ever going to get to a place where she thinks well of herself, now that would be a milestone, nevermind after this getting to the point where she'll believe Edward when he tells her that he didn't want to. (And I totally hate her for being the person all 'you can't imagine how that felt!' hello unsensitive bitch he was the one raped. But it's true, that's so Bella and I'm sick of everyone being all 'Bella's so selfless' because she's the exact opposite most of the time)
And then there's Edward with his baggage. It's in line with his overprotective nature issues at odds with the fact that he's the danger. Except amplified the hell up. Wow. The thing is that I thought that this thing should have almost happened anyway for real. But then even though the end is funny I just can't pair it with the pain of mere paragraphs before. And where is Edward's reaction to being raped?
I think this idea has some real potential. Maybe not fir a happy ending though, not sure if they have it in them :( Maybe if you take the idea and start another story faceted for the long run instead?
| Roxz chapter 1 . 12/27/2010
"It's sparkling" was the funniest thing I've ever read.
| meadow11 chapter 1 . 12/27/2010
ha! loved the ending!
| angel04une chapter 1 . 12/27/2010
I think u should make that into a story! If u don't do u think I could borrow this first chapter and write off of it! I have so many ideas from just reading that chapter! I of course would give u credit for starting my writting and credit for the first chapter. I have had writters block after finishing my first story but after reading this an explosion of ideas to go with this chapter happend in my twilight brain :p so what do u say?