Reviews for Just Below the Surface: An Adeptus Arbites Story
farisr chapter 14 . 11/25/2016
This is excellent,this deserves more reviews for it's sheer length and great story and plotline.
BladeMasterWolf chapter 14 . 6/9/2016
Updated Chapter 14 because it was missing ~50 pages of story, introducing the Bodyguard characters etc.

As for the dead-fic - yeah it was kinda dead due to both me moving on in my life for a while and work. But, who knows.

Ave Imperator
Van Erik Lucasan chapter 14 . 11/24/2015
This is a refreshing new Warhammer 40k fanfiction you made here BladeMasterWolf... and a great one at that!... Keep up the great work!... give this story its much-deserved completion!... This fancfiction is one of the few that I gave such glowing reviews... Make this Story complete PLEASE!
Commissar Critical chapter 14 . 4/18/2015
Jeez. Grimdark 10 right there.
Commissar Critical chapter 13 . 4/18/2015
Oh. Gross.
Commissar Critical chapter 10 . 4/18/2015
Where is the Inquisitor? Under threat/suspicion of a Tyranid infestation, any world worth anything major would have an Inqusitor sent over, not some Arbite Broad.
BladeMasterWolf chapter 1 . 11/14/2011

To those reading my story, first of all thanks.

Second of all, like I posted on my profile I have a sudden sledgehammer of Writers Block so by turn around process is slowing, not just on this but on my other projects (which I may or may not post up here depending on the reception on the fourm.)

Thank you for putting up with me and my erratic muse. I have tried money and choclate but she is a fickle one.
BasharMachine chapter 14 . 10/13/2011
Hey there,

I just read the story from chapter 1 to 14 in the last two days and now I really really want to continue reading, but I guess I just have to wait until you write more.

I really liked the way you described the live in a Hive, I had a little role playing group set in the 40K setting and I always had some difficulties describing Hive worlds to my players. Especially the "hab block war" is a really excellent idea.

Furthermore the guard vs tyranid fight in the underhive was described really good, I could nearly taste the fear and panic of the guardsmen.

Oh and of course the prayers and rites were really well placed and fitting and the descriptions of the Adeptus Arbites and their work was just great.

So long and please continue your story, as of today you got one more eager reader.
SchizBrain chapter 13 . 7/29/2011
I saw what you did there!

Bale is so Judge Dredd! XD

Loving the story, despite a few grammar and a lot of typos/spelling mistakes.
Ozzie81 chapter 14 . 6/28/2011
Read through the whole saga so far in about 2-3 days. I must say I really enjoyed it. Love the theme, atmosphere and plot development.

A minor criticism would be that things get really mixed up and confusing during some of the action sequences.

Keep it up, eagerly waiting for more.
United Systems Navy chapter 14 . 6/24/2011
Holy crap that was intense. Apsrt from the usul excess of spelling errors, this fanfic is unbelievblely well written and plotted. I like how the different plot elementsare slowly coming together. There are many memorable moments and your portrayal of the arbites and PDF is a welcome relief from Space Marines and IG, (not that they're unwelcome). Looking forward to many more chapters.
Sammy Holzbein chapter 14 . 6/21/2011
Wow, that was a whopper of a chapter. Perhaps a bit too long for reading comfort.

So I was partly right with my Khornate guess after all. A three-sided war? Sounds nasty. Or not, if the Nids got all of them.

And who might be responsible for that explosion? It can't be anything else but a deliberate terror bombing. Poor guys. Having helped those young cadettes, only to find them five minutes later as immollated piles of ash. That boy with half of his face seared off was especially gruesome and memorable.

I'm curious what the repercussions for that event will be. Who did it, and how will the hive population react?
Panoptikon chapter 4 . 2/5/2011
Hive city beat cops of the 41st Millenium - what a nasty line of work! I'm about four chapters in at this point and so far I'm intrigued. I always like reading about the lesser known heroes of the Imperium, and the Arbites are definitely an under-appreciated bunch. It's great to read about mere mortals like us triumphing over the evils in the galaxy; the Space Marines have had plenty of time in the spotlight, after all.

Like I said, I'm only a few chapters in right now, but I have noticed your writing skills steadily improving. Despite some grammatical hiccups, you've got a lot of great ideas and they still come across well in the story.

Anyhow, I'll come back with more feedback when I've gotten farther into your story - so for now I've gotta get reading.
Sammy Holzbein chapter 13 . 1/30/2011
Action, mystery, tention. This chapter got it all. Very gripping. Thanks for the enjoyment.
KanzenSakura chapter 1 . 1/27/2011
Dude, hey its me guillimansknight

Its nice this is on here I don't have to go through the hell of scrolling Miles on Warseer

though the comments on WS are Funny.(sorry iv Not Been doing that for à while)
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