|Reviews for Beyond Family|
| 2000Aerobars chapter 1 . 3/13
aaw, this I like. A LOT, Great job XD
| Panic chapter 14 . 11/20/2014
The story continues . . . . I'm so happy! Thanks for the update!
| Artemisgirl91 chapter 14 . 11/17/2014
Yes! I missed this story. Can't wit for the next chapter!
| Amazon Gold chapter 13 . 11/12/2014
What an amazing story! I should have glanced at the word count before I started reading it at ten pm (it's now 2am) I see you haven't updated in a couple of years but hope you do eventually.
| Madam'zelleGiry chapter 1 . 6/20/2014
Ooh, I loved this movie the last time I saw it... so much squeeful material for those of us literature freaks! Never looked at the fandom before, so this is pretty exciting.
Even without expressly writing the accents, you have a really fabulous handle on writing dialogue. It's been a long time since I saw the movie, but the way that it's written really brought me back into the world of the movie, and I could hear the characters from the movie speaking in their actual voices. I know from experience how hard it is to get any character from anything to sound right when you're writing, so I do have to say that I'm impressed with the way that you're doing this. Very nice flow, very realistic feel. Lovely!
"...unseen force smacked..." Slightly nitpicky, but I felt like this way of describing the blow seemed a little... over the top? It just seemed like the kind of thing I'd expect to read when someone was deliberately trying to sneak up from someone from behind and knock them out, rather than the more playful way that Skinner does it. Just a thought.
Very enjoyable chapter throughout. I love the way that you've captured the general tone and feeling of the canon story, and it feels like we have left off in a nice place after Quartermain's death. You've picked up the strings from the end of the movie really nicely, and that's something that carries on throughout. There's also a very distinct feeling of change that we get depending on which perspective we're seeing, and you're handling that very nicely.
Mmm, this Charlotte character seems quite interesting... I love the way that you're slowly introducing the mystery, so that there are different layers that we can enjoy and get a feel for before we're given all the information. Very nice pacing when it comes to how quickly to let the information go over to the reader.
I'm really enjoying this first chapter and looking forward to continuing the story! Really nicely done! Good luck on the rest of the story!
| wolfnymph1 chapter 5 . 4/15/2014
I think I've heard of the gem in a Ripley's Believe it or Not comic
| wolfnymph1 chapter 4 . 4/15/2014
Couldn't resist the Dickens reference could ya?
| czen chapter 13 . 3/18/2013
This is great, and super well written. I love it! Are you going to update it soon?
| Panic chapter 13 . 11/3/2012
Hey, great to see that you are alive and well. Once again, the chapter is fantastic. There is a small error in the paragraphs between Sawyer and Allan, where you left out the "w" in "who". But, great. And I loved the Jekyll/Hyde interaction. Perfect. Roll on next chapter
| Artemisgirl91 chapter 13 . 10/26/2012
I love this story so much! I can't wait for the next chapter!
| general zargon chapter 13 . 10/22/2012
Way to break up a serious moment, Skinner. ;) I LOLed at Allan's comment about Skinner putting on some clothes, and I really enjoyed how you wrote Charlotte's thoughts, and I look forward to finding out how her use-the-whale-bone-as-a-weapon plan works out (I bet it works!). :) Poor Henry, I wonder what Mina would think about it if she knew what he and Edward were talking about? I really liked this chapter, and I hope you update soon, because I want to find out how the rescue goes! Please keep up the excellent work!
| bkwrmnlvnit chapter 13 . 10/22/2012
This is honestly my favorite chapter so far. I loved the information on corsets, by the way. I thought it was really intriguing- I never knew that kind of stuff before. Of course, Charlotte is clever too, in using her clothing to defend herself. I like that you used her social status and the wealth of her family to give her a means of protecting herself against Morris.
The conversation between Tom and Quatermain was great. You got serious depth there with the description of family, and you showed a great truth. Tom's speech was pretty amazing, because you hit the nail on the head so directly. Tom defined family perfectly, and you did well with making the conversation between him and Quatermain.
And then you have Skinner, our loyal invisible thief, popping out of nowhere. I found that quite hilarious and was laughing like a maniac when I read that part. Bravo on that as well.
I loved the conversation between Jekyll and Hyde, and I think once more that you hit the nail on the head. You did wonderfully, telling about love and loss, and how if you truly love someone, you'll let them go. Few people realize that.
Overall, great job, and I can't wait to see more. Bravo, Bookworm!
From one Bookworm to another.
| bkwrmnlvnit chapter 12 . 10/2/2012
Wow. Did NOT see that coming. Bravo, Bookworm!
This story is absolutely amazing. I love how you use humor and research before you create chapters, and how much you keep to the characters. Mina, Henry, especially Skinner. You do a great job with them, and I know I enjoy reading things from Skinner's view especially. By the way, nice backstory for him- it almost made me cry, how sad and brutal that was. Poor Rodney...
You created a great villain, too. I thought that it was pretty amazing that you could make Morris so evil just by using a knife and some gemstones. I never in a million years would have thought of that. I can't wait for updates to see what happens next to poor Charlotte and good old Skinner.
Bravo with how you brought in Quatermain as well. Some other stories I've read just kind of shove him in there like "Hi, I should be dead, but I'm not. Wonderful weather we're having, eh?" You did not do that, and you gently brought him in, and did a great job with the context.
Quick question- is Charlotte ever going to learn about Skinner's identity, and if she does, what is going to happen with her and her father? Will Lord Talbot ever find out? I can imagine a mushroom cloud explosion if he does, if you know what I mean. That would be an interesting argument to say the least. I also want to compliment you on the dialogue between the characters, especially Skinner and Talbot.
Anyways, this review is probably way too long by now, so I'll finish it up. Great job, keep up the good work, and I can't wait to see what happens next!
Thanks for posting,
bkwrm (The other Bookworm)
| Orihime-San chapter 12 . 7/19/2012
so far ... THIS STORY IS FUCKING AWESOME!
SKINNER IS MY FAVORITE GENTLMEN!
CAN'T WAIT FOR NEXT CHAPTER!
KEEP ON WRITING!
| Panic chapter 12 . 4/27/2012
I guess I was right about the human sacrifice. I still really hope someone hits Talbot. If you want to know about other animal guards that Morris might use, I'd suggest rhino's or hippos. They are extremely fast and those horns are bloody dangerous. BTW hippos kill more people in water than crocodiles do, if you are thinking of using water guardians. Again, I love the detail in your chapers, and I can't wait to see the next few. I'm also pleased that Alan is back, as I find the interactions between him and skinner hilarious.