Reviews for Unnatural
Anonymous chapter 1 . 5/25/2014
Awesome, but GAY
Guest chapter 1 . 4/7/2014
OKAY SO I DON'T EVEN KNOW BUT READING THIS I WAS LIKE AHHH. I was wiggling around like a slug, I adore Kaynie but this was NEW AND I SHIP IT.
DinoDina chapter 1 . 4/7/2014
Someone other than me ships these two!
Yay! Good job. I love how Sticky admitted it first!
:D
thereadingturtle chapter 1 . 11/9/2013
You should write a sequal
Ferretess xxx chapter 1 . 7/3/2012
I'm amazed to see slash in this fandom, but I love it. :) It's so cute, and it's incredible that Sticky managed to admit it first. XD
AutumnIsNotSpring chapter 1 . 5/15/2012
I looked at some of the other reviews, and it made me kind of sad. They were all along the lines of "I don't know why I read this, I only read Kate/Reynie, bla bla bla" stuff like that, and I thought to myself, "am I the only person who specificly serched for this and was sad that only one came up?" because apparently I'm the only MBS fan that ships these two together...
zuzuthezombie chapter 1 . 5/14/2012
*clicks tounge* you know, the only pairing I actually support is Kaynie, but this is a great piece of writing.
Spark Writer chapter 1 . 2/21/2012
Awww! This is-WOW! I can't even believe how much I enjoyed this story...it was amazing! It's really cute, but at the same time it was completely mature and realistic. Bravo, Kahlan!

-Spark Writer-
Dove's Wing chapter 1 . 12/16/2011
Hi, Kahlan. It's been quite a while, hasn't it?

I was never the biggest fan of slash, but honestly, this was remarkable. Really, I think only you could pull this off so phenomenally. Reynie and Sticky are completely in character.

So, I combed through this very carefully-so meticulously even /I/ have to admit it was rather riduculous how picky I was being, but I was trying to get back in the hang of things-and only came up with one mistake (at least, I think it's a mistake...)

-"He was homeschooled, and so didn't have the greatest opportunity to meet people."

-It sounds a bit awkward to me. I suppose it isn't quite necessary to put a "he" between the "so" and "didn't," though that is one solution. The "so" could have been replaced with a "therefore" or something like that, though. The same thing occurs in the next sentence.

But other than that, this whole piece was brilliant. I loved the lines of:

-"(Kate managed by working nonstop – she'd gone shopping only because she claimed that, when she sneezed, algebra came out. Rhonda had told her to sneeze on Constance.)"

-"You're my best friend, Sticky," Reynie said absentmindedly. "If we didn't like each other that'd be a bit strange."

Absolutely perfect. :)

Well done, as always, Kahlan.

~Dove
Hi chapter 1 . 7/5/2011
Uh...I would just like to say 2 things. First, well written story! I don't usually read stuff like this, but I too was tired of all the cheesy Kate and Reynie stories out there. The only pair that I usually read is Kate and Reynie. But when I saw this, I was so disturbed that I thought, ah what the heck. The pair completely disturbs me. Sometimes, authors write a certain character to be gay, like Dumbledore, but sometimes, I think that some of the pairs people come up with are insane. But nice story!
Phoebe Yuu chapter 1 . 6/14/2011
aww, I'm so happy to found at least one Reynie/Sticky pairing in here, and a very good one! because you know, this boys were the only pairing I got the vibe from the books, since the 1st book. remember how Reynie stared at Sticky's sleeping face and then take care of him in their 1st night at Mr. Benedict's house? or the way he hugged him when sticky back from his detention with mud all over? yes, THAT give me a vibe for them. so please write more for them?
Grammar Defender chapter 1 . 3/12/2011
This is... interesting. I have to admit, this is much better than I thought it would be. I dislike basically any pairing that turns up on the MBS site. I just don't think that the books lend themselves to romance. Kaynie? Ick! Kacky? Gross! I guess I'm just not the romance type.

So as for an actual review, this is actually brilliantly executed. The romance isn't terribly over-done, and Sticky and Reynie are in character-except for the romance. I just don't think the situation is plausible.

Despite some of my best efforts, I didn't find any mistakes. I did find one thing that might be an error,but might also be a figure of speech. You said "...he simply couldn't believe Sticky would up and tell him about it." Shouldn't it be step up? Or square up? Or muscle up? Or is it supposed to be the way it is and I'm just too tired and ill to tell.

So basically, well written, but I don't like romance. Not a favorite, but still good.

~Grammar Defender~
laurenn0065 chapter 1 . 2/22/2011
what just happened where is the rest where is it i feel like flaming but i'm not because it is a good story so again WHERE IS THE REST?
TheOrchid chapter 1 . 2/15/2011
OMF. SO cute. XD There needs to be more of this pairing. Mou, I really wish there had been a kiss, but, ah well.
Thalia Castellan chapter 1 . 2/10/2011
I'm not quite sure why I picked this story to read. I have nothing against same-gender relationships, but despite my two most recent MBS stories, I have a relatively low tolerance for romance; of any kind. I'm glad I did, though, because this story was remarkably, and surprisingly, very enjoyable. Not only because, with the exclusion of Reynie's line, "sorry, Sticky, but you are," I found the entire story to be written IC; but also because you have a knack for an interesting humor I enjoy. Lines like:

-If someone had told Sticky that, in a few years' time, he'd fall in love with his best friend, he probably would have backed away slowly and made every attempt possible to have said someone committed. It was that scary a prospect.-

-Rhonda had told her to sneeze on Constance.-

and

-"You're my best friend, Sticky," Reynie said absentmindedly. "If we didn't like each other that'd be a bit strange."-

add a nice touch. And help to take away a bit of Sticky's nervousness and tension.

Another thing I liked was the end:

-"So... we never speak of this to anyone?"

"I'm all for it."-

a satisfactory ending that lets the reader draw their own conclusions is something only the best writers can pull-off. When done correctly, though, it's more than sufficient.

One last thing, I really admire your use of ( )s- - I know they have a name, but I can't, for the life of me, remember it. I still haven't managed to pull them off yet; at least not well. And the way you used them added an unique touch. Congrats.

Thalia Castellan.
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